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Consumer goods have become the most important part of people's lives. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Give reasons and examples of your own experience.

Consumer goods have become the most important part of people's lives. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Give reasons and examples of your own experience. 2brVM
In today's world, possession of materialistic goods has become an Integral part of a person's life. Consumerism has its own benefits and perils. This essay will critically analyze the advantages and disadvantages of the habit of possessioning more and more consumer goods. Undoubtedly, consumerism has its own advantages. Firstly, to cater to the ever-increasing demand of consumer products, the production and supply of these goods like mobiles, computers, and designer clothes have increased. So multinational companies manufacturing these goods are making huge profits, a share of which is helping the economy of the country. For instance, the sales of an Indian mobile company with a public-private company partnership has crossed the 100 crave mark, which has helped the Indian economy in the global market. Moreover, increased demand for these goods has led to a stiffer competition among manufacturers, thereby resulting in a significant decrease in the cost price of the products. To illustrate, over the last decade, the price of mobile phones has decreased steadily by about 5%. Finally, increased demand for materialistic products has given rise to various shopping malls, supermarkets, and online stores leading to increased jobs prospects for the local people. For example, our line shopping services have given employment opportunities to over 30% of the youth in urban India. Moreover, just as a coin has two sides, consumerism has its own perils. To begin with, people often end up buying unnecessary products after being lured by attractive advertisements. This has led to a dangerous hoarding mentality. For example, a recently conducted survey showed that in an average household in the United Kingdom, 35% of the products purchased are never used! In addition, possession of these goods has become a status symbol for the consumers who are willing to run into debts in order to purchase these consumer items. A survey shows that the credit card debts have risen by 60% in urban India, and the inability of repaying often leads to total consequences like suicide and bank forgery. To conclude, I firmly believe that the advantages of consumerism clearly outweigh the disadvantages. Instead of criticising this trend, people should curb their mentality of buying more goods than necessary so that a balance can be struck.
In
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today
's world, possession of materialistic
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goods
has become an Integral part of a person's life. Consumerism has its
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own
benefits and perils. This essay will
critically
analyze the advantages and disadvantages of the habit of
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possessioning
more and more
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consumer
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goods
.

Undoubtedly
, consumerism has its
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own
advantages.
Firstly
, to cater to the ever-increasing demand of
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consumer
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products
, the production and supply of these
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goods
like mobiles, computers, and designer clothes have
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increased
.
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So
multinational
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companies
manufacturing these
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goods
are making huge profits, a share of which is helping the economy of the country.
For instance
, the sales of an Indian mobile
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company
with a public-private
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company
partnership has crossed the 100 crave mark, which has
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helped
the Indian economy in the global market.
Moreover
,
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increased
demand for these
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goods
has led to a stiffer competition among manufacturers, thereby resulting in a significant decrease in the cost price of the
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products
. To illustrate, over the last decade, the price of mobile phones has decreased
steadily
by about 5%.
Finally
,
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increased
demand for materialistic
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products
has
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given
rise to various shopping malls, supermarkets, and online stores leading to
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increased
jobs prospects for the local
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people
.
For example
, our line shopping services have
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given
employment opportunities to over 30% of the youth in urban India.

Moreover
,
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just
as a coin has two sides, consumerism has its
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own
perils. To
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begin
with,
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people
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often
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end
up buying unnecessary
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products
after
being lured
by attractive advertisements. This has led to a
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dangerous
hoarding mentality.
For example
, a recently conducted survey
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showed
that in an average household in the United Kingdom, 35% of the
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products
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purchased
are never
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used
!
In addition
, possession of these
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goods
has become a status symbol for the
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consumers
who are willing to run into debts in order to
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purchase
these
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consumer
items. A survey
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shows
that the credit card debts have risen by 60% in urban India, and the inability of repaying
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often
leads to total
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consequences like
suicide and bank forgery.

To conclude
, I
firmly
believe that the advantages of consumerism
clearly
outweigh the disadvantages.
Instead
of
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criticising
this trend,
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people
should curb their mentality of buying more
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goods
than necessary
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so
that a balance can
be struck
.
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IELTS essay Consumer goods have become the most important part of people's lives. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Give reasons and examples of your own experience.

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