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In many places new houses are needed but only space available for building them is in the countryside Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there What is your opinion about this v.1

In many places new houses are needed but only space available for building them is in the countryside Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there What is your opinion about this v. 1
Nowadays, due to technology progress and growth of population more spaces for living are needed. The only possible solutions as some people think that to occupy countryside territories and build there new houses but other argue about this. I strongly believe that our society should think twice about protection the countryside environment and not build any houses. The most important argument that human should protect flora and fauna in countryside environment. As this part of cities surrounding can be too close to big and even huge megapolises these kinds of places should be protected in case of disturbing ecology and biorhythm systems. In some circumstances human activities as building houses can damage some rules of animals’ lives and even destroy this. As a result it can lead to negative effects of human life and ecology in overall. Another essential issue is that the countryside is the most popular place for spending time at weekends. And it should be available for people and their families especially for children. At present time with bed ecology in the majority of cities young generation are needed to breathe by fresh air and spend time on nature as in the countryside. At the same time children can be thought how to protect and behave in forests nearby in the future for example, how to help wild animals to survive next to human. Therefore with growth of population nowadays are rising new houses and districts but while it is happening human may lose the vital opportunity to touch sometimes the countryside’s nature and take essential needs for relaxing from hard working and everyday’s life. In other words, people should try to avoid places for building as countryside and think about human from all life’s aspects. In my opinion it can be possible if society will find another way to provide new houses and leave the countryside nit only for people pleasure but also for protection flora and fauna from human disturbing.
Nowadays, due to technology progress and growth of population more spaces for living
are needed
. The
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only
possible solutions as
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some
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people
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think
that to occupy
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countryside
territories and build there new
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houses
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but
other argue about this. I
strongly
believe that our society should
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think
twice about protection the
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countryside
environment and not build any
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houses
.

The most
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important
argument that
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human
should protect flora and fauna in
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countryside
environment. As this part of cities surrounding can be too close to
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big
and even huge
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megapolises
these kinds of places should
be protected
in case of disturbing ecology and biorhythm systems. In
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some
circumstances
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human
activities as building
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houses
can damage
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some
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rules
of animals’
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lives
and even
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destroy
this.
As a result
it can lead to
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negative
effects of
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human
life and ecology in
overall
.

Another essential issue is that the
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countryside
is the most popular place for spending
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time
at weekends. And it should be available for
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people
and their families
especially
for children. At present
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time
with bed ecology in the majority of cities young generation
are needed
to breathe by fresh air and spend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
on nature as in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countryside
. At the same
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time
children can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
how to protect and behave in forests nearby in the future
for example
, how to
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help
wild animals to survive
next
to
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human
.
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Therefore
with growth of population nowadays are rising new
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houses
and districts
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but
while it is happening
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human
may lose the vital opportunity to touch
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sometimes
the
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countryside’s
nature and take essential needs for relaxing from
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
hard working
and
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
’s life.

In other words
,
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people
should try to avoid places for building as
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countryside
and
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think
about
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human
from all life’s aspects. In my opinion it can be possible if society will find another way to provide new
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houses
and
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leave
the
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countryside
nit
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only
for
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people
pleasure
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but
also
for protection flora and fauna from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
disturbing.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay In many places new houses are needed but only space available for building them is in the countryside Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there What is your opinion about this v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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