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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? v.7

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? v. 7
It is considered by some that in spite of the need to build new houses, the countryside should be protected from any such constructions. In my opinion, homes are necessary and with a little bit of planning, we can construct them in the countryside without causing much damage to it. On the one hand, with the growing population, the demand for new residences is rising. The cities are becoming over-crowded and there is always a limit to exploiting the space in the city for construction. People in cities also need to have some free space that includes parks, gardens and orchards. Thus, it is not advisable to keep on building new homes in the city. Additionally, it will increase the pollution level in the city and affect the health of residents. Building homes in the uncultivated areas of the countryside is a solution to this problem. This area is lying unused and if it can be converted into residential space, it will ensure a fair distribution of population and will help in reducing the traffic congestion and pollution in the cities. Of course, there is some truth in the argument that countryside should be protected. However, in mu opinion, addressing the need for housing is an even bigger concern and it cannot be neglected. Hence, rather than imposing a carpet ban on all the construction activity in the rural area, the government and environmental activists should come up with a solution to build new homes without causing much damage to the serenity of villages. To conclude, in my opinion a diligent construction plan for new homes keeping in mind the preservation of environment in the countryside will be a win-win situation. It will not only cater to the increased demand for new houses but also preserve the beauty and purity of the countryside.
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houses
, the
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countryside
should
be protected
from any such
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constructions
. In my opinion,
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homes
are necessary and with a
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little bit
of planning, we can construct them in the
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countryside
without causing much damage to it.

On the one hand, with the growing population, the demand for
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new
residences is rising. The
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cities
are becoming over-crowded and there is always a limit to exploiting the space in the city for
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construction
.
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People
in
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cities
also
need to have
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some
free space that includes parks, gardens and orchards.
Thus
, it is not advisable to
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keep
on building
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new
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homes
in the city.
Additionally
, it will increase the pollution level in the city and affect the health of residents.

Building
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homes
in the uncultivated areas of the
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countryside
is a solution to this problem. This area is lying unused and if it can
be converted
into residential space, it will ensure a
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fair
distribution of population and will
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help
in reducing the traffic congestion and pollution in the
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cities
.
Of course
, there is
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some
truth in the argument that
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countryside
should
be protected
.
However
, in mu opinion, addressing the need for housing is an even bigger concern and it cannot
be neglected
.
Hence
,
rather
than imposing a carpet ban on all the
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construction
activity in the rural area, the
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government
and environmental activists should
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come
up with a solution to build
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new
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homes
without causing much damage to the serenity of villages.

To conclude
, in my opinion a diligent
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construction
plan for
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new
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homes
keeping in mind the preservation of environment in the
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countryside
will be a win-win situation. It will not
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only
cater to the increased demand for
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new
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houses
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but
also
preserve the beauty and purity of the
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countryside
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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