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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? v.53

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? v. 53
It is proverbial, a well-known fact that there is no empty land left in the urban areas for construction companies to develop new properties. Let me give a brief description of the current scenario below. City of New York is thriving in the global race in constructing skyscrapers for new offices and housing. The city also has a myriad of industries which attract immigrants from all disciplines who are seeking employment here. This is the causation for new property developments in the outskirts as the demand for new housing complexes had risen. Peoples controversy with the developers is that they should protect the environment in the villages and not to build new homes there. I opinionated that it is ok for retired families to enjoy the calm countryside and moreover, it is cheaper to afford a new home there. To think rationally, no employee or a business man can transit everyday from a village; similarly, new corporates cannot be established in villages just because professionals are residing there as operating businesses in villages is expensive due to lack of infrastructure. The panacea, solution for all problems arising from lack of residential spaces: develop new townships in the outskirts, strengthen the transport infrastructures so that everyone can travel to and fro to the commercial centres easily from their residences and incorporate new companies and business units at a close range to the new developing residential complexes so that there will be zero unemployment. In conclusion, my opinions from the above is to develop small residential zones along with small economic zones in the outskirts which in turn will help the economy to expand further.
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left
in the urban areas for construction
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companies
to develop
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new
properties.
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Let
me give a brief description of the
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current
scenario below.

City of
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New
York is thriving in the global race in constructing skyscrapers for
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new
offices and housing. The city
also
has a myriad of industries which attract immigrants from all disciplines who are seeking employment here. This is the causation for
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new
property developments in the outskirts as the demand for
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new
housing complexes had risen. Peoples controversy with the developers is that they should protect the environment in the
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villages
and not to build
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new
homes there. I opinionated that it is ok for retired families to enjoy the calm countryside and
moreover
, it is cheaper to afford a
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new
home there. To
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think
rationally
, no employee or a business
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man
can transit
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everyday
from a
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village
;
similarly
,
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new
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corporates
cannot
be established
in
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villages
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just
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because
professionals are residing there as operating businesses in
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villages
is expensive due to lack of infrastructure.

The panacea, solution for all problems arising from lack of residential spaces: develop
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new
townships in the outskirts,
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strengthen
the transport infrastructures
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so
that everyone can travel to and fro to the commercial
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centres
easily
from their residences and incorporate
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new
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companies
and business units at a close range to the
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new
developing residential complexes
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so
that there will be zero unemployment.

In conclusion
, my opinions from the above is to develop
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small
residential zones along with
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small
economic zones in the outskirts which in turn will
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help
the economy to expand
further
.
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? v. 53

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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