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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. v.3

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. v. 3
New housing is required in many nations, but the land to construct them is available in the villages only. Some would argue that the protection of the countryside is significant, and should not be used for the construction of houses. This essay totally agrees with this statement because the land of the villages is essential to cultivate fruits and vegetables, and many habitats would die, which will destroy the entire ecosystem of the world. The predominant reason of not to construct buildings in the countryside is that land of such areas are utilized for the cultivation of various supplies of food items. This is because food is an extremely important source for mankind to survive, and if villages are used for accommodation purposes, the citizens would be deprived from basic necessities, which would result in starvation. For example, a recent survey by the World Food Organization concluded that an abundance of fresh fruits and vegetables have been vanished in India due to massive construction of flats to accommodate the overpopulation. The other principal problem associated with the construction of buildings in the villages is that many habitats would soon become extinct, that could be a catastrophe for the ecosystem. That is to say that a disproportionate number of creatures are available in this world, that are safeguarding mankind from many potential diseases, which includes trees and plants. For instance, the Guardian reported that universe might have to face many problems in the future due to the massive construction of homes in the villages because it could result in the extinction of habitats that provide oxygen and absorb carbon dioxide. In conclusion, villages should be safeguarded because they are significant for the cultivation of natural foods, and if they are consumed to accommodate more people by building houses, precious natural resources will be lost that are required to support the ecosystem of the world.
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is required
in
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many
nations,
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but
the land to construct them is available in the
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villages
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only
.
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Some
would argue that the protection of the countryside is significant, and should not be
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used
for the
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construction
of
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houses
. This essay
totally
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agrees
with this statement
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because
the land of the
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villages
is essential to cultivate fruits and vegetables, and
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many
habitats would
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die
, which will
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destroy
the entire ecosystem of the world.

The predominant reason of not to construct buildings in the countryside is that land of such areas
are utilized
for the cultivation of various supplies of
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food
items. This is
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because
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food
is an
extremely
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important
source for mankind to survive, and if
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villages
are
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used
for accommodation purposes, the citizens would be
The usual collocation for "deprived" is "of" not "". Did you mean "deprived of"?
deprived from
Consider using "necessities".
basic necessities
, which would result in starvation.
For example
, a recent survey by the World
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Food
Organization concluded that an abundance of fresh fruits and vegetables have
been vanished
in India due to massive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
construction
of flats to accommodate the overpopulation.

The other principal problem associated with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
construction
of buildings in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
villages
is that
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many
habitats would
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soon
become extinct, that could be a catastrophe for the ecosystem.
That is
to say that a disproportionate number of creatures are available in this world, that are safeguarding mankind from
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many
potential diseases, which includes trees and plants.
For instance
, the Guardian reported that universe might
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have to
face
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many
problems in the future due to the massive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
construction
of homes in the
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villages
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because
it could result in the extinction of habitats that provide oxygen and absorb carbon dioxide.

In conclusion
,
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villages
should
be safeguarded
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because
they are significant for the cultivation of natural
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foods
, and if they
are consumed
to accommodate more
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people
by building
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
, precious natural resources will
be lost
that
are required
to support the ecosystem of the world.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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