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In many places,new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in countryside.Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this? Ga8m
Many cities are expanding from countryside by constructing homes and the high rise buildings. There are no possibility to build new construction in the city, by protecting environment near countryside. In my opinion, as the city become crowded, there is an expansion from outskirts for residential purpose. Firstly, cities become over populated due to young people are migrating to cities from villages for vast career opportunities. As there are increasing people who want to purchase home, but there are only old buildings which are possible to renovate in cities. The reason behind these, there are no more wide open space especially for construction although there are space for airports, parks, and grounds for the sport activities. Such as in Rajkot there is no new construction possible in the area like Gundawad and Laxminagar; on the contrary, new building are available near another area like the Sadhuvasavani road and the New 150ft ring road. Secondly, Countryside there are land of the forest and the farms which need to \cut down for the building purpose. In addition, it affects an environment and a wildlife in a plethora of aspects such as, the Lions in the Gir forest are easily coming out due to the fact the forests are no longer denser than past due to expansion of the near cities like Junagadh and Amreli so on. To over come issues of environmental damage there are another options for creating an artificial habitat for wildlife creatures in the another area. In order to conserve trees and environmental properties near country side, the government should revised the rules for the construction such as developing artificial forest and plant trees. In conclusion, There are increasing in occupiers of home than before, so no new home construction is possible in cities. As population increases in cities then there will be requirements of building new homes in countryside only by balancing environmental properties in other ways.
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in the city, by protecting environment
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. In my opinion, as the city become crowded, there is an expansion from outskirts for residential purpose.

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cities
become over populated due to young
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are migrating to
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cities
from villages for vast career opportunities. As there are increasing
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people
who want to
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purchase
home,
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there are
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buildings
which are possible to renovate in
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. The reason behind these, there are no more wide open space
especially
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construction
although there are space for airports, parks, and grounds for the sport activities. Such as in Rajkot there is no
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new
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construction
possible in the area like
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are available
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Secondly
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there are land of the
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forest
and the farms which need to \
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purpose.
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Gir
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forest
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easily
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near
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cities
like
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Junagadh
and
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Amreli
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on. To over
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issues of environmental damage there are another options for creating an artificial habitat for wildlife creatures in the another area. In order to conserve trees and environmental properties
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country side, the
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and plant trees.

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, There are increasing in occupiers of home than
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no
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home
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population increases in
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then there will be requirements of
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building
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homes
in
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countryside
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by balancing environmental properties in other ways.
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IELTS essay In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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