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In many parts of the world , families are smaller today . Is this positive or negative development for families and society

In many parts of the world, families are smaller today. Is this positive or negative development for families and society RwLXV
A generation ago, families used to be large with 6 or 7 members, but these days, there are 3 or 4 members in every 3 families. However, it can be beneficial for both government and parents. In this essay i will examine pros and cons of having few family members. Lets begin by looking good points of small family. Having 2 or 1 children is financially convenient for parents. Because they should spend money their child's education and provide them with food and clothes. Not all families can afford to this kind of commitments, especially, big families. That is why parents don't want to have many children. Another striking pros is that there will not overpopulation or sprawling and population of the town will not overcome with challenges when they are try to find work. Income of the jobs will be higher. Infrastructure of the city will improve. On the other hand, there are host of disadvantages of having small family is unsociable children. Children who grow up without siblings will become shy and quiet in the future. And some will have trouble with linguistic skills. Next huge cons for government is losing culture and language. If small number of people talk in specific language it may cause lose language. As a consequence culture of the country could die with number of population. Taking all things to consideration, there are both pros and cons of having small family. In spite of the fact that having a family with few members is financially comfortable and there will not overpopulation and sprawling negative effects shouldn't be overlooked such as shy and unsociable children and losing culture and language. Personally, I believe that drawbacks outweigh any benefits.
A generation ago,
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families
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used
to be large with 6 or 7 members,
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but
these days, there are 3 or 4 members in every 3
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families
.
However
, it can be beneficial for both
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government
and parents. In this essay
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will examine pros and cons of
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having
few
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family
members.

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begin
by looking
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good
points of
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small
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family
.
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2 or 1
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children
is
financially
convenient for parents.
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Because
they should spend money their child's education and provide them with food and clothes. Not all
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families
can afford to this kind of commitments,
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,
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big
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families
.
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why parents don't want to have
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children.

Another striking pros is that there will not overpopulation or sprawling and population of the town will not overcome with challenges when they are
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to find work. Income of the jobs will be higher. Infrastructure of the city will
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On the other hand
, there are
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of disadvantages of
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having
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small
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is unsociable
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children
.
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Children
who grow up without siblings will become shy and quiet in the future. And
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some
will have trouble with linguistic
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skills
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huge cons for
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government
is losing culture and
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language
.
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talk in specific
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it may cause lose
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.
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a consequence culture of the country could
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with number of population.

Taking all things to consideration, there are both pros and cons of
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small
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.
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the fact that
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a
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with few members is
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negative
effects shouldn't
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such as shy and unsociable
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children
and losing culture and
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language
.
Personally
, I believe that drawbacks outweigh any benefits.
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IELTS essay In many parts of the world, families are smaller today. Is this positive or negative development for families and society

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