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In many parts of the world, extended families- where parent, children, grandparents and sometimes other relatives live under one roof- are being replaced nuclear family’’ with only immediate family (parents and children) living together. Which type of family structure do you prefer, and why?

In many parts of the world, extended families- where parent, children, grandparents and sometimes other relatives live under one roof- are being replaced nuclear family’’ with only immediate family (parents and children) living together. Which type of family structure do you prefer, and why? JlGwk
I totally prefer live together with crowded families which parents, grandparents and other relatives. I think this way for two reasons which I exemine this essay. First, grand parents can teach too many thinks to children. They can share with us their personal experiences from life. Certainly they have too many knowledge about everything. It is probably that, most important learning method. In particular teenage people can use grand parents memory to learn something. Obviously, Old people like telling something about their life and their experiences. This is best exemplified for my personal experience. We living together with my father’s mom when I was a children. She teach me an animal love, walking, speaking etc. She always says me you are not never hurt any animal. She gives me water in midnight and then never sleeps until I sleep. Second, I like dinner with crowded area. If I were live with my relatives, I feel happy all dinner. For instance, being a crowded family is very critical for growing up children. In conclusion I wish, I live together with my grandparents and my cousins. As a result nowadays too many people prefer only live with their children.
I
totally
prefer
live
together with crowded families which parents, grandparents and other relatives.

I
think
this way for two reasons which I
exemine
this essay.

First
, grand parents can teach too
many
thinks
to children. They can share with us their personal experiences from life.

Certainly
they have too
many knowledge
about everything.

It is
probably
that, most
important
learning method.

In particular
teenage
people
can
use
grand parents memory to learn something.

Obviously
,
Old
people
like telling something about their life and their experiences.

This is best exemplified for my personal experience.
We living
together with my father’s mom when I was
a children
. She
teach
me an animal
love
, walking, speaking etc. She always
says
me you are
not never
hurt any animal.
She
gives me water in midnight and then never sleeps until I sleep.

Second, I like dinner with crowded area. If I were
live
with my relatives, I feel happy all dinner.

For instance
, being a crowded family is
very
critical for growing up children.

In
conclusion I
wish, I
live
together with my grandparents and my cousins.

As
a result nowadays too
many
people
prefer
only
live
with their children.
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IELTS essay In many parts of the world, extended families- where parent, children, grandparents and sometimes other relatives live under one roof- are being replaced nuclear family’’ with only immediate family (parents and children) living together. Which type of family structure do you prefer, and why?

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