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In many parts of the world children and teenagers are committing more crimes. Why is the case happening? How should children or teenagers be punished?

Juvenile delinquency is one of the biggest problem of the today's world. Youngsters are obligating more violation in many countries around the world. Due to lack of care and social media encourage them to do crimes. This essay intends to analyse the causes of crimes and provides some possible punishments for children crimes in upcoming fragments. To being with, the growth of delinquency committed by teenagers comes from various reasons. First and foremost cause is that negative family environment. Some children do not have happy life at their homes and this leads them to do some bad activities which they have never learned right and wrong. Moreover, kids do not get proper education on their life, so they indulge in bad actions which are not socially acceptable. In the present scenario, parents are busy in their hectic schedule, as a result they do not get free time to give preference to their children, then they feel alone which indulge then in bad company. In addition to this, there are various social sites which encourage them to do crimes as well as the burden of their education give them pressure on their mind so they choose the bad way to distract their mind. For an instance, a recent survey conducted by USA University 82. 09% children are having their home keys as their parents and guardians works. Hence, they turn to do crime to obtain money as they found anything that legally get them out of such situation. On the other hand, there are several solutions to fight with this problem. Primarily, government should enact the rule whose crime is not serious so they put in prison and ordered to do community service. What is more, parents should provide them proper education and tell them proper introduction about the wrong and right path as well. Youngsters who has serious crime so higher authority should impose penality and jail for long time. Last but not least, parents need to pay more attention to what their children are doing. In abridgement, as per my above confabulation it is axiomatic that although, to control the juvenile crime only can tackle by giving them punishments and fine. Parents should give proper time and care to their children.
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and provides
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some
possible punishments for
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children
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crimes
in upcoming fragments. To
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teenagers
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comes
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and foremost cause is that
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negative
family environment.
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Some
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children
do not have happy life at their homes and this leads them to do
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some
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bad
activities which they have never learned right and
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wrong
.
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, kids do not
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get
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proper
education on their life,
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so
they indulge in
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bad
actions which are not
socially
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parents
are busy in their hectic schedule,
as a result
they do not
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get
free time to give preference to their
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children
, then they feel alone which indulge then in
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bad
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company
.
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to this, there are various social sites which encourage them to do
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crimes
as well
as the burden of their education give them pressure on their mind
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so
they choose the
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bad
way to distract their mind. For an instance, a recent survey conducted by USA University 82. 09%
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children
are having their home keys as their
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parents
and guardians works.
Hence
, they turn to do
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crime
to obtain money as they found anything that
legally
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get
them out of such situation.
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, there are several solutions to fight with this problem.
Primarily
,
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whose
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crime
is not serious
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so
they put in prison and ordered to do community service.
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,
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parents
should provide them
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proper
education and
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them
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proper
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wrong
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crime
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higher authority should impose
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penality
and jail for long time. Last
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parents
need to pay more attention to what their
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are doing. In
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abridgement
, as per my above confabulation it is axiomatic that although, to control the juvenile
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crime
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children
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IELTS essay In many parts of the world children and teenagers are committing more crimes. Why is the case happening? How should children or teenagers be punished?

Essay
  American English
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