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In many countries, young people move to cities leaving their homes in rural areas for work or study. What do you think are the reasons for it? Do you think advantages for moving to cities outweigh disadvantages? v.1

In many countries, young people move to cities leaving their homes in rural areas for work or study. What do you think are the reasons for it? Do you think advantages for moving to cities outweigh disadvantages? v. 1
The frequency of people migrating to cities, increasing each day. Unemployment 10 the study, graduates to move to city others to study. This essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of moving to an urban place A huge number of young people from various rural areas are shifting to the city because of less infrastructure and development in their hometown for a study they could not have skilled teachers good equipment in rural areas. For instance, considering the ratio of people in coming to the city is gradually raised to the one-third population of the city when compared to past years. If a student moves to the city can get good opportunity job opportunities chance of attending higher studies working at a higher company and can get an eligible job with handsome pay in all cases it could not work out or similar. These days migrating to a city could make one beneficial, but this may not repeat or similar to each other. For example, job seeker came to a city of job, but he could not do it in return he must pay his living expenses. For students, it will be difficult to get a chance in higher standard universities because of the cut-throat competition several youngsters are facing different for several types of issues related to their career in the city even they could not make perfect food for themselves as compared to rural areas. In conclusion, I think that it is important to move to a city for better chances even the difficulties faced by youngsters, but they can achieve big I clearly believe that advantages can outweigh the disadvantages for the one who could make it possible.
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migrating to
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cities
, increasing each day. Unemployment 10 the
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study
, graduates to
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move
to city others to
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study
. This essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of moving to an urban
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A huge number of young
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people
from various rural areas are shifting to the city
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because
of less infrastructure and development in their hometown for a
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study
they could not have skilled teachers
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good
equipment in rural areas.
For instance
, considering the ratio of
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people
in coming to the city is
gradually
raised to the one-third population of the city when compared to past years. If a student
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moves
to the city can
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get
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good
opportunity
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job
opportunities chance of attending higher
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studies
working at a higher
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company
and can
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get
an eligible
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job
with handsome pay in all cases it could not work out or similar.

These days migrating to a city could
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make
one beneficial,
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but
this may not repeat or similar to each other.
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,
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seeker came to a city of
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,
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but
he could not do it in return he
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must
pay his living expenses. For students, it will be difficult to
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get
a chance in higher standard universities
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because
of the
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cut
-throat competition several youngsters are facing
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different
for several types of issues related to their career in the city even they could not
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make
perfect food for themselves as compared to rural areas.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that it is
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important
to
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move
to a city for better chances even the difficulties faced by youngsters,
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but
they can achieve
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big
I
clearly
believe that advantages can outweigh the disadvantages for the one who could
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make
it possible.
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IELTS essay In many countries, young people move to cities leaving their homes in rural areas for work or study. What do you think are the reasons for it? Do you think advantages for moving to cities outweigh disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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