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In many countries, very few young people read newspaper or follow the news on TV. what do you think are the cause of this? What solutions can you suggest? v.1

In many countries, very few young people read newspaper or follow the news on TV. what do you think are the cause of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1
There has been a dramatic increase in the numbers of newspaper and television channel over the last few years. Despite this increasing numbers, a large proportion of the population, which consist of youngsters seem uninteresting to pursue news on print and electronic media. Timings, traditional and boring way of presenting information and new interests among young are few factors that impede the youngster's attention towards reading or watching the news. However, there is a dire need to adapt new technologies to cater the youngster's interest. For instance, the online version of the news, easy accessibility and encouragement from guardians can help a lot in this regard. Firstly, the newspaper always comes in the morning, which is the busiest time for youngsters, as they are approaching schools and colleges at that time. Secondly, nowadays mass media are full of boring and traditional news, having nothing new for the youngster that can attract their attention. Thirdly, study loads and pressure of completing assignments, projects and research work are the main hindrances to following news on media. Apart from that, youngsters spend more time on social networking sites and that’s why they have less interest in traditional newspapers or news channels. However, the media could appeal numerous youngsters by providing them online news and video streaming by the use of technology that will be more convenient and easily accessible for them. Additionally, interaction by the forum, chats and comments also play a pivotal role in pulling target audience. Moreover, youngsters should have access to newspapers on bus stops, stations and waiting for areas of institutions. To sum up, I would like to say that new and innovative ways of information dissemination with the use of technological advancements would definitely influence youngsters. Accessibility of resources and guidance from the parents could also be fruitful.
There has been a dramatic increase in the numbers of
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newspaper
and television channel over the last few years. Despite this increasing numbers, a large proportion of the population, which consist of youngsters seem uninteresting to pursue
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news
on print and electronic
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media
. Timings, traditional and boring way of presenting information and
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new
interests among young are few factors that impede the youngster's attention towards reading or watching the
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news
.
However
, there is a dire need to adapt
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new
technologies to cater the youngster's interest.
For instance
, the online version of the
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news
, easy accessibility and encouragement from guardians can
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help
a lot in this regard.

Firstly
, the
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newspaper
always
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comes
in the morning, which is the busiest time for youngsters, as they are approaching schools and colleges at that time.
Secondly
, nowadays mass
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media
are full of boring and traditional
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news
, having nothing
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new
for the
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youngster
that can attract their attention.
Thirdly
, study loads and pressure of completing assignments, projects and research work are the main hindrances to following
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news
on
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media
. Apart from that, youngsters spend more time on social networking sites and that’s why they have less interest in traditional
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newspapers
or
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news
channels.

However
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
could appeal numerous youngsters by providing them online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
news
and video streaming by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of technology that will be more convenient and
easily
accessible for them.
Additionally
, interaction by the forum, chats and comments
also
play a pivotal role in pulling target audience.
Moreover
, youngsters should have access to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
on bus
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stops
, stations and waiting for areas of institutions.

To sum up, I would like to say that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
and innovative ways of information dissemination with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of technological advancements would definitely influence youngsters. Accessibility of resources and guidance from the parents could
also
be fruitful.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay In many countries, very few young people read newspaper or follow the news on TV. what do you think are the cause of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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