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in many countries women are able to join the armed forces just as men people say that only money should be member of the army Navy or airforce do you agree or disagree

in many countries women are able to join the armed forces just as men people say that only money should be member of the army Navy or airforce Bgap6
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world, the substantial influence of gender discrimination is an inevitable topic. It
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by fewer
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think
that the
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only
male should be part of the armed
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.
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highly
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disaccord
with the
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notion and this treatise would
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marshall
and explicate the facts in conjunction a logical conclusion.

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Analysing
and
further
explaining the reputable arguments in the
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favour
of my sentence,
primarily
the most conspicuous one is both
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men
and
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women
have equal rights. This is
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because
world has released that
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women
are
equally
capable as
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men
in both mentally and physical abilities. Girls are doing
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good
in every field like education health and
also
in police
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force
.
Moreover
, every
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organisation
and
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companies
hire their staff according to participants
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skill
qualifications
rather
than gender. Gender issues should not
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come
into way of the selection in
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. To corroborate, as per the article written in The Tribune by its author in 2010 assured that in China
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women
take high post
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ded
jobs in various type of
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companies
as well
as in police
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force
as compared to
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men
.

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probing
ahead, one more rational to
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substaniate
my crux that,
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women
are better in teamwork, coordination and communication
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because
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women
have better cognitive ability and
instead
of
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men
. They can solve any complication with full of concentration and focus as compared to
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men
. To indicate, as per the research conducted by New York women's of New York are more successful as compared to other Nation light of the fact that their
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government
promote
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womens
to doing work in any field.

After completing over hue
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jakad
of thoughts and speculations
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meticulouslyit
can
be concluded
a web listings in my opinion
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women
are
also
able to
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join
every field and
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forces
it is not true that females are less strong
rather
than males.
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IELTS essay in many countries women are able to join the armed forces just as men people say that only money should be member of the army Navy or airforce

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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