Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

In many countries women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household works. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

In many countries women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household works. v. 3
Now a days woman and men are working equally to sustain their life goals. Then it is fair to share their house hold activities together and not to give all the burden to woman’s head when it comes to house holds. I totally agree with this statement and I will clarify with reasons in this essay. To begin with this, if the couple is sharing their house chores with each other, that will mainly effect to their relationship with the positive way. Because they can negotiate their day to day activities while doing households. In addition to this, it will help to improve their love further. For instance, when the husband is trying to chop vegetables and trying to help for the kitchen activities, then the wife would think that how helpful her husband is. So that, they can share their stress together and pass their life borders together. On the other hand, involving to households together will make both husband and wife independent. As a result of this, if a one partner get a chance to go abroad, then he or she can manage their life without ask any help from anyone. They would have better knowledge about basic life hacks and how to prevent from it from sharing house hold activities when they live together. For an example, according to statistics of recent researches, from sri Lankan couples, 50%, even one partner has gone abroad. So that, they should know how to go with life without a patner. Then that will give beneficence to them. And also that will reduce unwanted affairs by less talking with others. In conclusion, as a couple, they should work together not only on house holds but also on every positive and negative aspects of their lives. Then only can build good and strong relationship to make their lives better.
Did you mean "nowadays"?
Now a days
woman and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
are working
equally
to sustain their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
goals. Then it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fair
to share their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hold
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activities
together and not to give all the burden to woman’s head when it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
holds
. I
totally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this statement and I will clarify with reasons in this essay.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with this, if the couple is sharing their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
chores with each other, that will
mainly
Did you mean "affect"?
effect
to their relationship with the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
way.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
they can negotiate their
It appears that two hyphens are missing.
day to day
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activities
while doing households.
In addition
to this, it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
further
.
For instance
, when the husband is trying to chop vegetables and trying to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
for the kitchen
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activities
, then the wife would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that how helpful her husband is.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
that, they can share their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
together and pass their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
borders together.

On the other hand
, involving to households together will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
both husband and wife independent.
As a result
of this, if a one partner
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a chance to go abroad, then he or she can manage their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
without ask any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
from anyone. They would have better knowledge about basic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
hacks and how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
from it from sharing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hold
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activities
when they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
together. For an example, according to statistics of recent researches, from
Possible spelling mistake found.
sri
Lankan couples, 50%, even one partner has gone abroad.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
that, they should know how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
go with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
without a
Possible spelling mistake found.
patner
. Then that will give beneficence to them. And
also
that will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
unwanted affairs by less talking with others.

In conclusion
, as a couple, they should work together not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
holds
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
on every
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
aspects of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. Then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
can build
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
and strong relationship to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
better.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
Learning another language is not only learning different words for the same things, but learning another way to think about things.
Flora Lewis

IELTS essay In many countries women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household works. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts