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In many countries weddings are getting big and expensive today as they were in past Why do you think this is the case Is it a negative or positive development v.1

In many countries weddings are getting big and expensive today as they were in past Why do you think this is the case Is it a negative or positive development v. 1
In recent years, the amount of waste has increased significantly. Furthermore, it may cause terrible consequences which are extremely challenging to tackle. For the reason that, governments have to take precautions to solve this issue. This essay will explore the reasons and recommend the possible solutions. To begin with, nowadays, the quantity of junk has increased as a result of crowded populations. To illustrate this, last researches which are done by population and environment professionals shows that, in the most crowded cities, junk production is considerably higher than small terrors as a result of excessive consumption. Secondly, there is another problem which is caused by the number of rubbish dumps. There are no enough available rubbish dumps to keep all this trash. For some reason, people which are living in a city think that, rubbish dumps have bad-looking and they do not fit into city view. In order to deny this view, these kinds of buildings have crucial effects on the city's protection against the pollution. These problems, which are enormously important for the city. It might be better to take precautions to tackle with both these issues. Otherwise, the city will become much dirtier due to waste. On the other hand, there are some possible solutions which might be useful to tackle these issues such as burning the lumber and allocate more money to campaigns which are trying to deal with those issues. For instance, some environmentalists support that, the most efficient way to reduce the amount of the trash is burning them. It is also cheaper and healthier than other ways. Moreover, setting up or financially supporting some campaigns which are responsible with these issues is also available. Furthermore, it would be also helpful to give knowledge about the importance of this hassle. In conclusion, dealing with that issue might be heavily hard. For the reason that, as I mentioned, it would be reasonable to take precautions. Although those protections would not be useful in the present, at least those would be enough to deter people to be filthy.
In recent years, the amount of waste has increased
significantly
.
Furthermore
, it may cause terrible consequences which are
extremely
challenging
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to tackle
. For the
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reason
that,
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governments
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have to
take precautions to solve this
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issue
. This essay will explore the
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reasons
and recommend the possible solutions.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, nowadays, the quantity of junk has increased
as a result
of crowded populations. To illustrate this, last researches which
are done
by population and environment professionals
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shows
that, in the most crowded
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cities
, junk production is
considerably
higher than
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small
terrors
as a result
of excessive consumption.
Secondly
, there is another problem which
is caused
by the number of rubbish dumps. There are no
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
available rubbish dumps to
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keep
all this trash. For
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some
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reason
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
which are living in a city
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that, rubbish dumps have
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
bad-looking and
they do not fit into city view. In order to deny this view, these kinds of buildings have crucial effects on the city's protection against the pollution.

These problems, which are
enormously
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
for the city. It might be better to take precautions to tackle with both these
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issues
.
Otherwise
, the city will become much dirtier due to waste.

On the other hand
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
possible solutions which might be useful to tackle these
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issues
such as burning the lumber and allocate more money to campaigns which are trying to deal with those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issues
.
For instance
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
environmentalists support that, the most efficient way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the amount of the trash is burning them. It is
also
cheaper and healthier than other ways.
Moreover
, setting up or
financially
supporting
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
campaigns which are responsible with these
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issues
is
also
available.
Furthermore
, it would be
also
helpful to give knowledge about the importance of this hassle.

In conclusion
, dealing with that
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issue
might be
heavily
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
. For the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reason
that, as I mentioned, it would be reasonable to take precautions. Although those protections would not be useful in the present, at least those would be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to deter
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to be filthy.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In many countries weddings are getting big and expensive today as they were in past Why do you think this is the case Is it a negative or positive development v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
341 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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