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In many countries, plastic bags are one the main sources of damage to the environment, and so they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

In many countries, plastic bags are one the main sources of damage to the environment, and so they should be banned. v. 1
There is no doubt that our environment is polluted seriously. There are many countries have forbidden bags made from plastic because they think those are one of the key factors to the contamination. I strongly agree with that opinion, this essay will support my view. Firstly, plastic bags extremely injured the environment. To clarify, plastic takes many centuries to be completely dissolved in comparison with other materials, that means those handbags will be maintained into the earth and the sea after discharged for a very long time. A degraded land with tons of plastic will intercept the growth of plants, that causes many bad effects to animals lived in the land. Plastic bags also injured the underwater animals, for example, tortoises do not know the plastic bags and they eat it. Secondly, poly bags not only damage the environment but also harm the human health. Many researches point out that plastic consists of some chemical substances, which can be absorbed by food and cause some bad diseases like cancer. To take one example, a person who usually eats street foods which are packed with plastic have a higher rate to take cancer than other ones. Bad effects on children’s brain development also are witnessed by scientists when they eat food contained those bad substances. In brief, plastic bag are one of the main reasons that makes environment become polluted, that also cause many bad effects on our health, so it is better to ban the one-time bags or replace that by other materials.
There is no doubt that our
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environment
is polluted
seriously
. There are
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many
countries have forbidden
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bags
made from
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plastic
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because
they
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think
those are one of the key factors to the contamination. I
strongly
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agree
with that opinion, this essay will support my view.

Firstly
,
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plastic
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bags
extremely
injured the
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environment
. To clarify,
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plastic
takes
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many
centuries to be completely dissolved
in comparison
with other materials, that means those handbags will
be maintained
into the earth and the sea after discharged for a
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very
long time. A degraded land with tons of
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plastic
will intercept the growth of plants, that causes
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many
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bad
effects to animals
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lived
in the land.
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Plastic
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bags
also
injured the underwater animals,
for example
, tortoises do not know the
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plastic
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bags and
they eat it.

Secondly
,
poly
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bags
not
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only
damage the
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environment
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but
also
harm the human health.
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Many
researches point out that
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plastic
consists of
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some
chemical substances, which can
be absorbed
by food and cause
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some
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bad
diseases like cancer. To take one example, a person who
usually
eats street foods which
are packed
with
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plastic
have a higher rate to take cancer than other ones.
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Bad
effects on children’s brain development
also
are witnessed
by scientists when they eat food contained those
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bad
substances.

In brief
,
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plastic
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bag
are one of the main reasons that
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makes
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environment
become polluted, that
also
cause
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many
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bad
effects on our health,
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so
it is better to ban the one-time
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bags
or replace that by other materials.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries, plastic bags are one the main sources of damage to the environment, and so they should be banned. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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