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In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. Some claim that this has negative effects on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. Some claim that this has negative effects on both families and societies. Y08r
Nowadays, there is a trend that traditional food would be replaced by international fast food in many countries. In my opinion, this trend affects both families and societies although it may meet the living styles of some modern people. The popularity of fast food has negative effects on people’s health. Most the fast food highs in fat, calories, and sugar, which may cause some diseases. For example, many Americans suffer from obesity because they have overconsumed fast food, including hamburgers, chips. Obesity also leads to other illness, which can further undermine their health. This makes them work less effectively and produce less goods so that they earn less money. Another consequence of the popularity of the fast food is that it can reduce the diversity of food. The growing number of fast food restaurants means that customers consume more frequently in those restaurants and less frequently in those restaurants that make traditional food. This makes the owners of these traditional restaurants earn less money or even lose money and they are likely to abandon the business of traditional food. As a result, numerous kinds of traditional cuisines may disappear. This means that people’s lives will be less colorful because of limited food they can taste if fast food continues to attract more and more consumers. On the other hand, fast food meets the living styles of modern people. Most of them are very busy in their daily lives so they desire to decrease their time spent on meals. This desire can be accomplished by consuming fast food since consuming that requires much less time than traditional food. Therefore, workers who eat fast food would have more time and create more wealth than others. In conclusion, the popularity of fast food has more negative influences than positive influences although it may satisfy some needs of modern people.
Nowadays, there is a trend that
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food
would
be replaced
by international
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fast
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food
in
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many
countries. In my opinion, this trend affects both families and societies although it may
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meet
the living styles of
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some
modern
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people
.

The popularity of
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fast
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food
has
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negative
effects on
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people’s
health. Most the
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fast
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food
highs in
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fat
, calories, and sugar, which may cause
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some
diseases.
For example
,
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many
Americans suffer from obesity
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because
they have
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overconsumed
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fast
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food
, including hamburgers, chips. Obesity
also
leads to other illness, which can
further
undermine their health. This
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makes
them work
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less
effectively
and produce
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less
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goods
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so
that they earn
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less
money.

Another consequence of the popularity of the
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fast
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food
is that it can
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reduce
the diversity of
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food
. The growing number of
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fast
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food
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restaurants
means that customers consume more
frequently
in those
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restaurants
and
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less
frequently
in those
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restaurants
that
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make
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traditional
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. This
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makes
the owners of these
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traditional
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restaurants
earn
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money or even lose
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money and
they are likely to abandon the business of
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traditional
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food
.
As a result
, numerous kinds of
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traditional
cuisines may disappear. This means that
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people’s
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lives
will be
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less
colorful
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because
of limited
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food
they can taste if
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fast
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continues to attract more and more consumers.

On the other hand
,
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meets the living styles of modern
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people
. Most of them are
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very
busy in their daily
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lives
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so
they desire to decrease their time spent on meals. This desire can
be accomplished
by consuming
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fast
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food
since consuming that requires much
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less
time than
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traditional
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food
.
Therefore
, workers who eat
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fast
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food
would have more time and create more wealth than others.

In conclusion
, the popularity of
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fast
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food
has more
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negative
influences than
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positive
influences although it may satisfy
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some
needs of modern
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people
.
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IELTS essay In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. Some claim that this has negative effects on both families and societies.

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