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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam.’ How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam. ’ How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? r9P2
It is a fact that automobile ownership has dramatically gone up and this trend seems to keep ongoing. Therefore, even smaller cities are affected by enormous traffic jams. The reason why car possession is so popular is affordability and its convenience. The demand for car purchases has been increasing remarkably. In the case that a price of a new one is too high for you, there is a possibility of buying used car. Even purchasing a brand new vehicle does not have to be a big deal, as you can buy it via an installment plan. Regular families, with a sufficient monthly income, have usually more than one automobile. Thus, car transportation has become an easy and accessible way of traveling, I do not think people will re-evaluate their attitude towards it. As a consequence people choose a car rather than taking public transport. In addition, many countries have a problem with infrastructure which might not always be well developed. For instance, this is also a problem in Slovakia. For the reasons mentioned above, the government should take an action. Firstly, state governments could not only promote public transport as a good option as a car traveling, but also make it cheaper and more accessible. Secondly, a good idea would be the creation of a shared car network and support it with mobile applications similar to uber. Finally, crowded cities might impose higher taxes for car ownership or even on entering the city by car as a tourist. Moreover, cities might increase parking fees. I personally think this would lead to a decrease in interset of car possession or its usage. In conclusion, I honestly think that government should have a final word and take action towards discouraging people from using cars. This solution can slowly lead to a change overall attitude of automobile ownership.
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dramatically
gone up and this trend seems to
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keep
ongoing.
Therefore
, even smaller
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cities
are
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affected
by enormous traffic jams.

The reason why
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car
possession is
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so
popular is affordability and its convenience. The demand for
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car
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purchases
has been increasing
remarkably
. In the case that a price of a new one is too high for you, there is a possibility of buying
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used
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car
. Even purchasing a
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brand new
vehicle does not
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have to
be a
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big
deal, as you can
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buy
it via an installment plan. Regular families, with a sufficient monthly income, have
usually
more than one automobile.

Thus
,
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car
transportation has become an easy and accessible way of traveling, I do not
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think
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people
will re-evaluate their attitude towards it.
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As
a consequence
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people
choose a
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car
rather
than taking public transport.
In addition
,
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many
countries have a problem with infrastructure which might not always be
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well developed
.
For instance
, this is
also
a problem in Slovakia. For the reasons mentioned above, the
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government
should take an action.

Firstly
, state
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governments
could not
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only
promote public transport as a
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good
option as a
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car
traveling,
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but
also
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make
it cheaper and more accessible.
Secondly
, a
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good
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idea
would be the creation of a shared
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car
network and support it with mobile applications similar to
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uber
.
Finally
, crowded
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cities
might impose higher taxes for
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car
ownership or even on entering the city by
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car
as a tourist.
Moreover
,
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cities
might increase parking fees. I
personally
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think
this would lead to a decrease in
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interset
of
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car
possession or its usage.

In conclusion
, I
honestly
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think
that
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government
should have a final word and take action towards discouraging
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people
from using
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cars
. This solution can
slowly
lead to a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
overall
attitude of automobile ownership.
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IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam. ’ How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
6.0
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