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In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.3

In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. with this opinion? v. 3
We are observing the young generation who have made plenty of changes in every aspect of life. Some are inventive and meaningful but some are not really accepted by their predecessor especially about their eating instincts and lifestyles. In my opinion, I prefer to not decide if these changes really do harm to their health and stay neutral because I see both of advantages and drawbacks of this issue. On the one hand, in many developed countries, the young especially teenagers are consuming too much fast foods that contain vast amount of sugar, additives, chemical colors but low nutrients instead of vegetables and proteins which is conventionally prepared. This has led to the rising number of people having obesity and diabetes. And I won't deny that it is clear there are a deterioration in health of nowadays generation. Also, some kids are likely to stay indoors more than their former generation and stick to video games and computers. Furthermore, staying up late at night and waking up late are the common habits of today's teenagers because of their school tasks, deadlines or maybe just a chat with their friends. However, the young today are not always careless about their health and their life. Trends such as eating organic products, becoming vegetarian are set up by many young persons to raise the awareness of healthy body and acquiring a longevity in their life. Clubs of sport are established more and more by youngsters to earning a good shape and good health state. What is more, they become activists who give helps not only for people at their age but also the elders who want to become healthy to approach to many health instructions and helpful information about medic and ways to protect health. And despite having a busy life, some people are trying to find their own way to playing sports and eating rationally. In conclusion, I believe that though the changes that the modern generation has made may be not really suitable for the previous generation, they are just a justification to the society. So they must have weak spots and strengths that we need to considerate properly
We are observing the
young
generation who have made
plenty
of
changes
in every aspect of
life
.
Some
are inventive and meaningful
but
some
are not
really
accepted
by their predecessor
especially
about their eating instincts and lifestyles. In my opinion, I prefer to not decide if these
changes
really
do harm to their
health
and stay neutral
because
I
see
both of advantages and drawbacks of this issue.

On the one hand, in
many
developed countries
, the
young
especially
teenagers
are consuming too much
fast
foods that contain vast amount of sugar, additives, chemical colors
but
low nutrients
instead
of vegetables and proteins which is
conventionally
prepared. This has led to the rising number of
people
having obesity and diabetes. And I won't deny that it is
clear
there are a deterioration in
health
of nowadays generation.
Also
,
some
kids are likely to stay indoors more than their former generation and stick to video games and computers.
Furthermore
, staying up late at night and waking up late are the common habits of
today
's
teenagers
because
of their school tasks, deadlines or maybe
just
a chat with their friends.

However
, the
young
today
are not always careless about their
health
and their
life
. Trends such as eating organic products, becoming vegetarian
are set
up by
many
young
persons to raise the awareness of healthy body and acquiring a longevity in their
life
. Clubs of sport
are established
more and more by youngsters to earning a
good
shape and
good
health
state.
What is more
, they become activists who give
helps
not
only
for
people
at their age
but
also
the elders who want to become healthy to approach to
many
health
instructions and helpful information about medic and ways to protect
health
. And despite having a busy
life
,
some
people
are trying to find their
own
way to playing sports and eating
rationally
.

In conclusion
, I believe that though the
changes
that the modern generation has made may be not
really
suitable for the previous generation, they are
just
a justification to the society.
So
they
must
have weak spots and strengths that we need to considerate
properly
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries today, the eating habits and lifestyles of children are different from those of previous generations. Some people say this has had a negative effect on their health. with this opinion? v. 3

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357 words
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