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In many countries today parents are able to send their children to single sex school. Some people think that this have disadvantages in later life. v.1

In many countries today parents are able to send their children to single sex school. Some people think that this have disadvantages in later life. v. 1
It is the toughest decision for the parents to choose schools for their children. Many parents choose single gender schools, while others go for mixed gender schools. It is thought my people that studying in single gender schools have disadvantages for students in their later life. However, there are arguments on both sides which will be discussed in further paragraphs before forming a pertinent outlook. According to the Forbes, when students are segregated by genders, they miss opportunities to work together and to develop vital social skills. As a result, this creates problems in forming adult relationships as children get older. Furthermore, when girls and boys are taught under separate roofs they wrongly conclude that one gender is better or inferior than the other. What is more, in many countries single gender schools are considered as discrimination or against the law. Last but not the least, when students go to mixed gender schools they are exposed to a wider range of experiences than those who go to single sex classes. Nevertheless, there are few advantages too of single gender schools. Firstly, having a classroom with both genders can create distractions. For instance, when girls and boys talk about their crush, they focus less on their studies. So this is not the scenario with the co-educational schools. Secondly, in mixed gender schools all the subjects are a part of the curriculum, but, in fact, boys and girls are good in particular subjects so co-education schools is advantageous as they focus on particular subjects based on the gender. To recapitulate, I believe that there are more disadvantages in comparison with the advantages as single gender schools do not provide a richer experience and it also harms the society.
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schools
for their children.
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Many
parents choose
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single
gender
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schools
, while others go for mixed gender
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schools
. It is
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thought
my
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people
that studying in
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single
gender
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schools
have disadvantages for students in their later life.
However
, there are arguments on both sides which will
be discussed
in
further
paragraphs
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before
forming a pertinent outlook.

According to the Forbes, when students
are segregated
by genders, they miss opportunities to work together and to develop vital social
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skills
.
As a result
, this creates problems in forming adult relationships as children
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get
older.
Furthermore
, when girls and boys
are taught
under separate roofs they
wrongly
conclude that one gender is better or
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inferior than
the other.
What is more
, in
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many
countries
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single
gender
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schools
are considered
as discrimination or against the law. Last
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but
not the least, when students go to mixed gender
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schools
they
are exposed
to a wider range of experiences than those who go to
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single
sex classes.

Nevertheless
, there are few advantages too of
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single
gender
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schools
.
Firstly
, having a classroom with both genders can create distractions.
For instance
, when girls and boys talk about their crush, they focus less on their studies.
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So
this is not the scenario with the co-educational
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schools
.
Secondly
, in mixed gender
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schools
all the subjects are a part of the curriculum,
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but
, in fact, boys and girls are
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good
in particular
subjects
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so
co-education
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schools
is advantageous as they focus on particular subjects based on the gender.

To recapitulate, I believe that there are more disadvantages
in comparison
with the advantages as
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single
gender
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
do not provide a richer experience and it
also
harms the society.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries today parents are able to send their children to single sex school. Some people think that this have disadvantages in later life. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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