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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree? v.9

In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. v. 9
Choosing proper schools for their children is complicated problem for parents. Although there are two options that single-sex schools and mixed schools, some people believe that single-gender school affects negatively future of students. I partially agree with this statement and think that it has equally benefits and drawbacks. On the one hand, studying at single-sex schools has less discipline issues, which allows effective class time. When boys and girls learning together, there are various contradictions which lead bad behavior in the classroom among two genders. In contrast, single-gender schools can avoid this kind of problems and as a result, everyone would completely focus on their lesson. For example, a recent study found that 85%of students who study at single-sex high schools have more ability of concentrate than students of co-educational high schools. Therefore, this type of schools does not waste special time and improves attention skills. On the other hand, single-gender school cannot be mirror of genuine society but mixed school can do. In other words, the latter provide opportunities to build skills such as cooperating which they need to have for successful future in real world. If males and females work together, it will give chance to learn different perspectives from each other and teamwork which is mainly required ability by companies. In fact, the major criteria of Gatsuurt company, one of the big organizations in Mongolia, is co-working in order to employ. Thus, co-educational schools positively contribute children to become skillful citizen rather than single-gender schools. In conclusion, I agree with single-sex educational institutions have disadvantages. However, it has also advantages for children to study without disturbs and be productive.
Choosing proper
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schools
for their children
is complicated
problem for parents. Although there are two options that single-sex
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schools
and mixed
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schools
,
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some
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people
believe that single-gender
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school
affects
negatively
future of students. I
partially
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agree
with this statement and
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think
that it has
equally
benefits and drawbacks.

On the one hand, studying at single-sex
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schools
has less discipline issues, which
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allows
effective
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class
time. When boys and girls learning together, there are various contradictions which lead
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bad
behavior in the classroom among two genders.
In contrast
, single-gender
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schools
can avoid this kind of problems and
as a result
, everyone would completely focus on their lesson.
For example
, a recent study found that 85%of students who study at single-sex high
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schools
have more ability of concentrate than students of co-educational high
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schools
.
Therefore
, this type of
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schools
does not waste special time and
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improves
attention
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skills
.

On the other hand
, single-gender
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school
cannot be
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mirror
of genuine society
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but
mixed
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school
can do.
In other words
, the latter provide opportunities to build
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skills
such as cooperating which they need to have for successful future in real world. If males and females work together, it will give chance to learn
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different
perspectives from each other and teamwork which is
mainly
required ability by
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companies
. In fact, the major criteria of
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Gatsuurt
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company
, one of the
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big
organizations in Mongolia, is co-working in order to employ.
Thus
, co-educational
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schools
positively
contribute children to become skillful citizen
rather
than single-gender schools.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
with single-sex educational institutions have disadvantages.
However
, it has
also
advantages for children to study without disturbs and be productive.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.5
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