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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree? v.6

In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. v. 6
Exploring the world is a passion for some people. Nowadays, it is easier for them to travel anywhere in the world. Such trip will help them to improve their physical and mental health. However, they need some experience or training to travel some place with extreme weather and challenging situations. It is true that there are some difficulties in travelling in terrible conditions such as Strom, and high snow fall. So the people those are physically fit can go ahead with their dream journey. For instance, climbing mountains or moving through snow is risky for the people with heart disease or Asthma. So such people in a team will affect others, they should have to pay attention to them rather than their tour. Moreover, travelling to remote areas is sometimes dangerous in bad weather because it will take time to reach any help if they need. However, the training and experience will help them to succeed up to a limit. This will help them to stay fit moreover, have the courage to face any problems in life. For example, throughout the journey they have always been ready to tackle critical situations like varying weather, accidents though they are trained for that. So such experience helps them to face challenging situations in the life. To illustrate, there are lots of opportunities are open to the people who are willing to go for a voyage. Even though to travel some places they need training to handle situations that they never experienced before. However, these difficulties are negligible when compared to its advantages like physical and mental health improvement.
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improve
their physical and mental health.
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, they need
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some
experience or training to travel
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place with extreme weather and challenging situations.

It is true that there are
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difficulties in travelling in terrible conditions such as
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Strom
, and high snow fall.
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people
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, climbing mountains or moving through snow is risky for the
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people
with heart disease or Asthma.
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such
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people
in a team will affect others, they should
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rather
than their tour.
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, travelling to remote areas is
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because
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help
if they need.

However
, the training and experience will
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help
them to succeed up to a limit. This will
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help
them to stay fit
moreover
, have the courage to face any problems in life.
For example
, throughout the journey they have always been ready to tackle critical situations like varying weather, accidents though they
are trained
for that.
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So
such experience
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helps
them to face challenging situations in the life.

To illustrate, there are lots of opportunities are open to the
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people
who are willing to go for a voyage.
Even though
to travel
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some
places they need training
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, these difficulties are negligible when compared to its advantages like physical and mental health improvement.
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Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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