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El Nino is the name of warm ocean current that affects weather of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare the normal conditions in the Pacific with El Nino Conditions v.1

El Nino is the name of warm ocean current that affects weather of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare the normal conditions in the Pacific with El Nino Conditions v. 1
Recently, a lot of people usually watch films on mobile phones or tablets. Some people think that cinema is not necessary for us. However, some say that cinema can fully our enjoyment and some people need to watch films in a cinema. In my view, I believe that cinema cannot disappear. There are many reasons that I believe that cinema is necessary. The first reason is movie house is not only the place for sees movies, but also they can give new experience for everyone. For example, people decide to watch films in a theatre because they want to see 4D which more real and people will have more emotional with the character on the films. Another reason is people want to relax and going outside the home. So, the cinema is one of the best choices for them to choose. In addition, some cinemas have a comfortable seat, you can enjoy your movies by leaning your body on softy sofa and eating popcorn with some drink. On the other hand, some people argue that cinema is not needed anymore because if people want to watch movies or series, they can watch in mobile phones or tablets since it more convenient. Firstly, you can watch it every time. For instance, you are watching movies during in public transport. Secondly, it is lower cost. A lot of movies always available for free, you do not spend money on it. Finally, you can choose whatever stories you want to see. In conclusion, even some people do not go to the cinema, but some decide to go. In my opinion, it is not easy that cinema will take over and finally disappear.
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cannot disappear.

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people
will have more emotional with the character on the films. Another reason is
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people
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is one of the best choices for them to choose.
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some
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cinemas
have a comfortable seat, you can enjoy your
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On the other hand
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in mobile phones or tablets since it more convenient.
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it every time.
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movies
during in public transport.
Secondly
, it is lower cost.
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always available for free, you do not spend money on it.
Finally
, you can choose whatever stories you
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want
to
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see
.

In conclusion
, even
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,
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decide to go. In my opinion, it is not easy that
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will take over and
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7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay El Nino is the name of warm ocean current that affects weather of the Pacific Ocean. The diagrams compare the normal conditions in the Pacific with El Nino Conditions v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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