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In many countries today, many highly qualified graduates struggle to find employment. What factors may have caused this situation? What can be done about it?

In many countries today, many highly qualified graduates struggle to find employment. What factors may have caused this situation? What can be done about it? BY5E9
As an increasing number of people go to university, it is now common that graduates cannot find employment. This is a worrying situation, but there are some solutions to it. The current problem of graduate unemployment is largely caused by there being too many graduates. In the past fifty years, going to university has evolved from being an extremely rare occurrence for the smartest students who wished to learn specialist knowledge into something that millions of young people do. The result is a surplus of over-qualified candidates chasing the same jobs. In many countries, the economy is contracting and these graduates have to fight over very few available positions. The ones who do not get a job are left unemployed because they feel too qualified to take a lower-level position and work their way up, especially after having spent four years gaining advanced qualifications. Thankfully, there are some possible solutions. The first thing to do is to recognise that higher education has become too common, and so perhaps it is time that alternative routes are sought. Rather than going from high school to university, students can instead be encouraged to find a vocational training program and enter the workforce soon after leaving school. This would allow them to learn some practical skills rather than the theoretical knowledge they would get from university, and then build up real work experience over a long period of time. In addition, universities could set up better facilities for students to get such practical experience, so that when they look for employment after graduation, they will not be at such a disadvantage. In conclusion, many graduates are unable to find employment nowadays, and there are various reasons for this. The solutions are not easy to apply, but there are some possibilities to reduce the severity of this situation.
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common that
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cannot find employment. This is a worrying situation,
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there are
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solutions to it.

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problem of
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unemployment is
largely
caused by there being too
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many
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graduates
. In the past fifty years, going to
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university
has evolved from being an
extremely
rare occurrence for the smartest students who wished to learn specialist knowledge into something that millions of young
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people
do. The result is a surplus of over-qualified candidates chasing the same jobs. In
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many
countries, the economy is contracting and these
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graduates
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have to
fight over
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few available positions. The ones who do not
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get
a job are
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left
unemployed
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they feel too qualified to take a lower-level position and work their way up,
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after having spent four years gaining advanced qualifications.

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possible solutions. The
first
thing to do is to
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that higher education has become too common, and
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so
perhaps it is time that alternative routes
are sought
.
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than going from high school to
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university
, students can
instead
be encouraged
to find a vocational training program and enter the workforce
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soon
after leaving school. This would
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allow
them to learn
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some
practical
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skills
rather
than the theoretical knowledge they would
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get
from
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university
, and then build up real work experience over a long period of time.
In addition
,
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universities
could set up better facilities for students to
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get
such practical experience,
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so
that when they look for employment after graduation, they will not be at such a disadvantage.

In conclusion
,
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many
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graduates
are unable to find employment nowadays, and there are various reasons for this. The solutions are not easy to apply,
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but
there are
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some
possibilities to
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reduce
the severity of this situation.
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IELTS essay In many countries today, many highly qualified graduates struggle to find employment. What factors may have caused this situation? What can be done about it?

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