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In many countries, teenagers are encouraged to do part-time jobs. What’s the situation like in your country? What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of doing part-time jobs?

In many countries, teenagers are encouraged to do part-time jobs. What’s the situation like in your country? What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of doing part-time jobs? Xr2A
Some countries such as the USA and UK encourage their secondary school students to do part time jobs. There are many pros and cons of this practice, which shall be discussed in this essay. On the positive side, a teenager's job can teach work skills that will serve him well in college and prepare him for careers in adulthood. To add to it, he can acquire confidence, develop a sense of responsibilityy and feel more independent. Earning money will enable him to buy things he wants and will provide an opportunity for learning responsible money management. What is more, studies find that students who work a moderate amount—no more than 10 to 15 hours a week during the school years—tend to earn higher grades than those who don't work at all. Furthermore, if parents work outside the home, an after-school job can give the teenager adult supervision in those crucial afternoon hours. Finally, the right jobs may expose him to new workpossibilities and set him on the path to a lifetime career. Teens also gain useful, marketable skills such as improving their communication, learning how to handle people, developing interview skills and filling out job applications. On the other hand, working more than 13 to 20 hours a week is associated with lower grades. Teens who work too many hours find it difficult to keep up extracurricular activities and social relationships. Some studies have found that teens who work long hours are more likely to engage in such risky activities as using illegal drugs or alcohol - in part because they are exposed to older co-workers who lead them astray. Finally, early entry into a negative or harsh work environment may encourage negative views of work. This would depend greatly on the maturity level of the teenager and the type of job obtained. In India, teenagers generally do not work part time. This practice has recently started in big cities but is not very popular yet. Summing up, teenagers are definitely benefited by working part time. However, the type of work should be carefully chosen and they should not be allowed to work more than 10-15 hours a week.
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countries such as the USA and UK encourage their secondary school students to do part

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time
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jobs
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pros and cons of this practice, which shall
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in this essay.

On the
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positive
side, a
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teenager
's
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can teach
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work
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skills
that will serve him well in college and

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prepare
him for careers in adulthood. To
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to it, he can acquire confidence, develop a sense of
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responsibilityy
and feel more independent. Earning money will enable him to
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buy
things he wants and will provide an opportunity for learning responsible money management.
What is more
, studies find that students
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who
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work
a moderate amount—no more than 10 to 15
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hours
a week during the school years—tend to earn higher grades than those
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who
don't
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work
at all.

Furthermore
, if parents
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outside the home, an after-school
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job
can give the
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teenager
adult

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supervision
in those crucial afternoon
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hours
.
Finally
, the right
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jobs
may expose him to new
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workpossibilities
and set him on the path to a lifetime career. Teens
also
gain useful,
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marketable


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skills
such as improving their communication, learning how to handle
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people
, developing interview
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skills
and filling out
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job
applications.

On the other hand
, working more than 13 to 20
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hours
a week
is associated
with lower grades.

Teens
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work
too
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many
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hours
find it difficult to
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keep
up extracurricular activities and social

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relationships
.
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Some
studies have found that teens
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work
long
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hours
are more likely
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to


engage in such risky activities as using illegal drugs or alcohol
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-
in part
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because
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exposed
to older co-workers
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who
lead them astray.
Finally
, early entry into a
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negative
or harsh
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work
environment may encourage
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negative
views of
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work
. This would depend
greatly
on the maturity level of the
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teenager
and the type of
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job
obtained.

In India,
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generally
do not
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work
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part time
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started
in
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big
cities
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Summing up,
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teenagers
are definitely benefited by working
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part time
.
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, the type of work

should be
carefully
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chosen and
they should not be
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to
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work
more than 10-15
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week
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IELTS essay In many countries, teenagers are encouraged to do part-time jobs. What’s the situation like in your country? What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of doing part-time jobs?

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