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In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish causing pollution on land and in the water, so people think they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish causing pollution on land and in the water, so people think they should be banned. v. 6
It is commonly believed by some masses that the use of plastic polyethene ought to be prohibited as it is regarded the pollutant which pollute water and soil in many nations. I am in consummate accord that polythene bags should be strictly banned as it is non biodegradable substance. To begin with, the use of plastic polythene is increasing at alarming rate in multiple countries as it is cheaper. And, after using it, people throw it as debris which further do not decompose by the biological action of microorganisms. In this way, the plastic particles would blend with soil and pollute the land. Moreover, some hazardous particles of plastic would enter in human body and animal body through food that is grown in soil and causes several health related problems such as cancer etcetera. also, if the soil would be enriched with the polluting particles of plastic than the crops would not get enough nutrients from soil for its proper growth and development. Additionally, the water is also going to be polluted when some persons throw waste plastic pieces in ponds and rivers. Generally speaking, the plastic would not dissolve in water and hinder the growth of marine animals and plants. Therefore, if the animals like fish inhale oxygen from water than the plastic segments would go to their body and fishes will loss their life. To illustrate, the national flower ' lotus' in my home country is going to be extinct due to the presence to plastic wastage. In conclusion, my opinion is that the use of plastic bags should be strictly banned which have negative consequences on human and animals species.
It is
commonly
believed by
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some
masses that the
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use
of
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plastic
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polyethene
ought to
be prohibited
as it
is regarded
the pollutant which pollute
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water
and
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soil
in
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many
nations. I am in consummate accord that polythene bags should be
strictly
banned as it is
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non biodegradable
substance.

To
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begin
with, the
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use
of
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plastic
polythene is increasing at alarming rate in multiple countries as it is cheaper. And, after using it,
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people
throw it as debris which
further
do not decompose by the biological action of microorganisms. In this way, the
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plastic
particles would blend with
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soil
and pollute the land.
Moreover
,
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some
hazardous particles of
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plastic
would enter in human body and
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animal
body through food that
is grown
in
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soil
and causes
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several health
related problems such as cancer etcetera.
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also
, if the
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soil
would
be enriched
with the polluting particles of
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plastic
than the crops would not
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get
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enough
nutrients from
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soil
for its proper growth and development.

Additionally
, the
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water
is
also
going to
be polluted
when
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some
persons throw waste
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plastic
pieces in ponds and rivers.
Generally
speaking, the
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plastic
would not dissolve in
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water
and hinder the growth of marine
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animals
and plants.
Therefore
, if the
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animals
like fish inhale oxygen from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
than the
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plastic
segments would go to their body and fishes will loss their life. To illustrate, the national flower '
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lotus&
#039; in my home country is going to be extinct due to the presence to
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plastic
wastage.

In conclusion
, my opinion is that the
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use
of
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plastic
bags should be
strictly
banned which have
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negative
consequences on human and
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animals
species.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many countries plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish causing pollution on land and in the water, so people think they should be banned. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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