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In many countries, people of senior positions receive higher salaries compared with other workers in the same company or organization. Some people think that this is not justifiable. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries, people of senior positions receive higher salaries compared with other workers in the same company or organization. Some people think that this is not justifiable. kb3rn
Nowadays, most countries believe that it is fair to pay people with senior positions with higher salary than those of junior staff working in the same company but others think it is not fair. In this essay, I will discuss the reasons why I completely agree that it is only just to reward staff with senior positions. The main reason for holding to my view point is that senior staff members tend to have more experience in their industry, as well as the knowledge that they can share not only to junior staff but to the whole team regardless of their specific role. Some senior positions require strong leadership skills and teaching abilities. Aside from providing mentorship and supervision, employees with seniority, play a significant factor in the chain of command in an organization. Seniority level members influence juniors to have the willingness to take initiative on projects and giving solutions when problem arise. It motivates junior members to gain full understanding of their industry and to aspire for promotion. Further more, senior status is not an easy job to acquire. One must have a higher education and in some organization employers require employees to pass a certain tests to officially be granted as a senior staff. This position is hard earned, seniority carry more weight as they take more duties and responsibilities compared to junior staff. They demonstrate commitment and reliability that is being manifest in their work. In conclusion, it is only right that senior staff has a higher salary than of the junior staff working in the same company.
Nowadays, most countries believe that it is
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fair
to pay
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people
with
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senior
positions with higher salary than those of
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junior
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staff
working in the same
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company
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others
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it is not
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In this essay, I will discuss the reasons why I completely
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agree
that it is
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to reward
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staff
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positions.

The main reason for holding to my view point is that
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senior
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staff
members tend to have more experience in their industry,
as well
as the knowledge that they can share not
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only
to
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junior
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staff
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but
to the whole team regardless of their specific role.
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Some
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senior
positions require strong leadership
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skills
and teaching abilities. Aside from providing mentorship and supervision, employees with seniority, play a significant factor in the chain of command in an organization. Seniority level members influence juniors to have the willingness to take initiative on projects and giving solutions when problem arise. It motivates
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junior
members to gain full understanding of their industry and to aspire for promotion.

Further
more,
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senior
status is not an easy job to acquire. One
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must
have a higher education and in
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some
organization employers require employees to pass a certain
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tests
to
officially
be granted
as a
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senior
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staff
. This position is
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hard earned
, seniority carry more weight as they take more duties and responsibilities compared to
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junior
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staff
. They demonstrate commitment and reliability
that is
being manifest in their work.

In conclusion
, it is
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only
right that
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senior
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staff
has a higher salary than of the
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junior
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staff
working in the same
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company
.
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IELTS essay In many countries, people of senior positions receive higher salaries compared with other workers in the same company or organization. Some people think that this is not justifiable.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
262 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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