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Some people think that government is wasting money on art. Instead this money can be spend on other criteria. Till what ex6end do you agree.

Some people think that government is wasting money on art. Instead this money can be spend on other criteria. Till what ex6end do you agree. 3Mjjd

There are several debates on such topics, but I personally believe that art is most gift from our ancestors and we should keep it secure. Government has taken many step to secure this glorious task. Although some percentage of population believe that these step are waste and this money should be spend on other crucious projects, which is not fully true. Furthermore, this art helps to improve yourselves with many different methods like culture and tradition. Moreover, this art attract tourists from all over the world which also help our tourism industry to increase and attract more and more population. Arts is our legacy from our ancestors and in order to save it government should take some major steps and set some rules. The money spend on arts is worth it and should be kept continue.

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but
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 is most gift from our Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).ancestors, and
ancestors and
 we should This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 it secure.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
Government
 has taken This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 step to secure this glorious task. Although This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 percentage of population believe that Did you mean "this step" or "these steps"?this stepthese steps
these step
 are waste and this money should be Consider using the past participle "spent"?spent
spend
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crucious
 projects, which is not fully
 true.

Furthermore
, this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcraftprofession
art
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assists
helps
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
 yourselves with This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 methods like culture and tradition. Moreover
, this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcraftprofession
art
 attract tourists from all over the world which also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 our tourism industry to increase and attract more and more population.

Arts is our legacy from our ancestors and in order to save it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
 should take This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 major steps and set This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :requirements
rules
. The money Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: "spends".spends
spend
 on You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcraftprofession
arts
 is worth it and should be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retained
kept
 continue. 