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In many countries people do not recycle their rubbish as much as they could Why do you think this is What can be done to change this v.1

In many countries people do not recycle their rubbish as much as they could Why do you think this is What can be done to change this v. 1
There is an ever-increasing use of technology, such as laptops, tablets and desktops in schools and universities for education. It is often argued that this is a positive development, while others believe it is causing adverse ramifications. This essay agrees with the idea of using technology in education for its invaluable benefits to students as well as teachers. This essay will discuss both points of view. It is clearly evident that, technology brings immediate access to an enormous amount of information for the student’s reference purpose. Students are more often required to write articles on different aspects as a part of their education, this is where technology plays a crucial role in providing them with a wide variety of material at the touch of a button. It is therefore agreed that computers act as a friendly companion for students proving their beneficial uses. For example, Wikipedia, this is one of the popular websites that every student is interested in. When student’s enters a keyword, it provides them with the history of the keyword all in one place. However, many disagree and feel that technology acts a barrier in real-life human interaction. Human interaction teaches many like skills such as, empathy, discipline and discourse. Despite this, human interaction is still possible through the internet and this essay disagrees that technology is creating negative effects for this reason. For instance, the discovery of online interaction tools like Skype and Facebook has changed the level of communication. People reach out to friends across oceans with just a touch of a button which was not possible earlier. To conclude, while the benefits of technology, particularly the internet, allow the students to tap into limitless information in a fraction of a second, some still believe that it is a new phenomenon which may curb the human face to face interaction. However, in my opinion, as long as we can keep in mind the importance of human interaction in education, it is clearly positive on educational benefits.
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agrees
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for its invaluable benefits to
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students
as well
as teachers. This essay will discuss both points of view.

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clearly
evident that,
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technology
brings immediate access to an enormous amount of information for the
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student’s
reference purpose.
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Students
are more
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often
required to write articles on
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different
aspects as a part of their
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education
, this is where
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technology
plays a crucial role in providing them with a wide variety of material at the touch of a button. It is
therefore
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agreed
that computers act as a friendly companion for
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students
proving their beneficial
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uses
.
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, Wikipedia, this is one of the popular websites that every
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student
is interested
in. When
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student’s
enters a keyword, it provides them with the history of the keyword all in one place.

However
,
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disagree and feel that
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acts a barrier in real-life
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teaches
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like
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skills
such as, empathy, discipline and discourse. Despite this,
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human
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interaction
is
still
possible through the internet and this essay disagrees that
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technology
is creating
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negative
effects
for this reason
.
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, the discovery of online
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interaction
tools like Skype and Facebook has
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changed
the level of communication.
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People
reach out to friends across oceans with
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just
a touch of a button which was not possible earlier.

To conclude
, while the benefits of
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technology
,
particularly
the internet,
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allow
the
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students
to tap into limitless information in a fraction of a second,
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some
still
believe that it is a new phenomenon which may curb the
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human
face to face
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interaction
.
However
, in my opinion, as long as we can
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keep
in mind the importance of
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interaction
in
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education
, it is
clearly
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positive
on educational benefits.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay In many countries people do not recycle their rubbish as much as they could Why do you think this is What can be done to change this v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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