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Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. do you agree or disagree? v.9

Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. v. 9
Many traditionalists believe that many people have access to the Internet, however, conventional newspapers will continue as the major source of news. I totally disagree with this view. The speed and convenience of the Internet in this digital age have led to the increasing popularity of online news. Firstly, the Internet is able to provide up-to-the-minute news as it happens, 24 hours a day every day. As long as 1 have my smart phone or laptop with me, 1 can connect almost instantly to the Internet, surf the websites and access the news of my choice across the globe. Secondly, more and more people now’ have access to the Internet and this trend appears set to continue. The more widespread the accessibility of the Internet, the more people will come to rely on it as their new’s source. In contrast, newspapers have drawbacks which affect their popularity. One major disincentive of relying on newspapers as a news source is the cost. Competing with freely available news online, newspaper publishers are facing the reality of falling circulation figures. Some major American newspapers have now’ introduced online versions alongside their printed editions in an attempt to arrest this trend. Another disadvantage of newspapers is the amount of paper consumed in their production. With growing environmental awareness, there is a body of public opinion, which rejects buying newspapers because this involves cutting trees and transporting them to paper mills. While this may not be a major factor at present, the environmental argument will almost certainly gain ground in the future. In conclusion, I would argue that newspapers will continue to decline in importance, and more and more people will use the Internet to access the news.
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traditionalists believe that
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people
have
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to the Internet,
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, conventional
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newspapers
will continue as the
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. I
totally
disagree with this view.

The speed and convenience of the Internet in this digital age have led to the increasing popularity of online
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news
.
Firstly
, the Internet is able to provide up-to-the-minute
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news
as it happens, 24 hours a day every day. As long as 1 have my smart phone or laptop with me, 1 can connect almost
instantly
to the Internet, surf the websites and
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access
the
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news
of my choice across the globe.
Secondly
, more and more
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people
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now
’ have
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access
to the Internet and this trend appears set to continue. The more widespread the accessibility of the Internet, the more
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people
will
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come
to rely on it as their
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source.

In contrast
,
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newspapers
have drawbacks which affect their popularity. One
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major
disincentive of relying on
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newspapers
as a
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news
source is the cost. Competing with
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online,
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newspaper
publishers are facing the reality of falling circulation figures.
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Some
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American
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newspapers
have
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now
’ introduced online versions alongside their printed editions in an attempt to arrest this trend. Another disadvantage of
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newspapers
is the amount of paper consumed in their production. With growing environmental awareness, there is a body of public opinion, which rejects buying
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newspapers
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because
this involves cutting trees and transporting them to paper mills. While this may not be a
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major
factor at present, the environmental argument will almost
certainly
gain ground in the future.

In conclusion
, I would argue that
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newspapers
will continue to decline in importance, and more and more
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people
will
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use
the Internet to
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access
the
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news
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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