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In many countries good schools and medical facilities only available in cities. Some people believe that new teachers and doctors should work in rural area for few years, but some think everyone should be free to choose where they work. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.

In many countries good schools and medical facilities only available in cities. Some people believe that new teachers and doctors should work in rural area for few years, but some think everyone should be free to choose where they work. eD0x
In recent decades, marvelous schools and medical amenities are solely accessible in urban areas all over the globe. It is considered by some people that teachers and doctors who are noval in these fields ought to work in villages in order to help their countries become successful with young descendants, while there are others who think that government should give freedom to everybody to select their own working place. In my opinion, specialists in education and medical spheres should gain experience in countrysides after graduation. On the one hand, government should let staffs choose their own working areas so as to increase the productivity. Firstly, if professionals do not have rights to decide where they work, they will have tendency to lose the savour in their jobs. This leads to genuinely tremendous troubles including listlessness among teachers and doctors, because of unwilling atmosphere and spending money for useless approach. For this reason, they ought to make decisions where they want to work. Secondly, they will migrate to another wealthy countries in order to work in their dreamy places with their well-qualified jobs. On the other hand, government should provide an incentive for employees whose professions are teachers and doctors to keep on their carier in rural areas for a few years due to the lack of interests and the lack of belief in medical system among people. They should be urged to work there and provide with great encouragement to the population of villages. After all, young generations start being interested in those occupations. Additionally, people are moving to city centres to get educational qualifications or find treatment to their diseases and it leads to overpopulation in cities. If new teachers and doctors pay a visit to places where are far from urban areas, government will be able to deprive the overpopulation in cities. In conclusion, taking new staffs to countrysides will be more effective and worthwhile than giving freedom to them for developing countries successfully.
In recent decades, marvelous schools and medical amenities are
solely
accessible in urban
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areas
all over the globe. It
is considered
by
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some
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people
that
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teachers
and
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doctors
who are
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noval
in these fields ought to
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work
in villages in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
their countries become successful with young descendants, while there are others who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that
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government
should give freedom to everybody to select their
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own
working place. In my opinion, specialists in education and medical spheres should gain experience in countrysides after graduation.

On the one hand,
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government
should
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let
staffs choose their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
working
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areas
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
increase the productivity.
Firstly
, if professionals do not have rights to decide where they
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work
, they will have tendency to lose the
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savour
in their jobs. This leads to
genuinely
tremendous troubles including listlessness among
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teachers
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
doctors
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of unwilling atmosphere and spending money for useless approach.
For this reason
, they ought to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
decisions where they want to
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work
.
Secondly
, they will migrate to another wealthy countries in order to
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work
in their dreamy places with their well-qualified jobs.

On the other hand
,
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government
should provide an incentive for employees whose professions are
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teachers
and
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doctors
to
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keep
on their
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carier
in rural
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areas
for a few years due to the lack of interests and the lack of belief in medical system among
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people
. They should
be urged
to
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work
there and provide with great encouragement to the population of villages.
After all
, young generations
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start
being interested
in those occupations.
Additionally
,
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people
are moving to city
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centres
to
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get
educational qualifications or find treatment to their diseases and it leads to overpopulation in cities. If new
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teachers
and
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doctors
pay a visit to places where are far from urban
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areas
,
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government
will be able to deprive the overpopulation in cities.

In conclusion
, taking new staffs to countrysides will be more effective and worthwhile than giving freedom to them for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developing countries
successfully
.
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IELTS essay In many countries good schools and medical facilities only available in cities. Some people believe that new teachers and doctors should work in rural area for few years, but some think everyone should be free to choose where they work.

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