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In many countries, a small number of people get a lot of money .some people think that this is good for the country, but others argue that the government should apply a maximum level of salary. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In many countries, a small number of people get a lot of money. some people think that this is good for the country, but others argue that the government should apply a maximum level of salary. RVk7Q
It would be argued by some that the incomes of people should be kept at a specific level. In my opinion, however, it is reasonable to allow people to earn as much as possible. On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why some believe that governments should introduce a maximum salary. The first reason is people think this will lead to economic and social equality. A few professions that make great contributions to society such as teaching, medical job, etc. solely have a medium or low income, whereas some YouTubers who do not truly play an important role in society could earn thousands of dollars per month. In Vietnam, for example, a high school teacher only gets an average monthly salary of about 300 dollars. By contrast, a famous comedian could receive incredible 5, 000 dollars per night. On the other hand, I would argue that the rich are an essential part of the development of the country. They earn more money because they have extensive knowledge or special skills so that other people could learn much from them. Sharks Tank - a real show in Vietnam, for instance, where the thriving entrepreneurs share their experience and wisdom in business, they also give chances for young people to build their own start-ups. By joining the show, a number of Vietnamese companies develop significantly, and as a result, promote economic development. Regarding the social aspect, the rich contribute a majority of donations every year. The more money they get, the more they help the community. In conclusion, photo some people think that governments should apply a maximum wage, I personally believe that encouraging citizens to earn more money is necessary for the development of every country.
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that the incomes of
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some
believe that
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governments
should introduce a maximum salary. The
first
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people
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think
this will lead to economic and social equality. A few professions that
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make
great contributions to society such as teaching, medical job, etc.
solely
have a medium or low income, whereas
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some
YouTubers who do not
truly
play an
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important
role in society could
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earn
thousands of dollars per month. In Vietnam,
for example
, a high school teacher
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only
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gets
an average monthly salary of about 300 dollars. By contrast, a
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famous
comedian could receive incredible 5, 000 dollars per night.

On the other hand
, I would argue that the rich are an essential part of the development of the country. They
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earn
more money
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because
they have extensive knowledge or special
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skills
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so
that other
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people
could learn much from them. Sharks Tank
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a real
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show
in Vietnam,
for instance
, where the thriving entrepreneurs share their experience and wisdom in business, they
also
give chances for young
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people
to build their
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own
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start
-ups. By joining the
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show
, a number of Vietnamese
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companies
develop
significantly
, and
as a result
, promote economic development. Regarding the social aspect, the rich contribute a majority of donations every year. The more money they
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get
, the more they
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help
the community.

In conclusion
, photo
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some
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people
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think
that
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governments
should apply a maximum wage, I
personally
believe that encouraging citizens to
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earn
more money is necessary for the development of every country.
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IELTS essay In many countries, a small number of people get a lot of money. some people think that this is good for the country, but others argue that the government should apply a maximum level of salary.

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