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Violent video games should be banned

Violent video games should be banned NymRb
Age restrictions won't give much impact on the game. A lot of adults who did mass shootings were inspired by violent video games. I had a friend who once played violent video games. He said that he was so shocked because of how detailed the game was. 'The storyline of the game was about our character was an illegal worker and we got a mission to murder some victim's family because the victim accidentally pissed our character's boss. we will have an option of how will we murder or torture the victims, and we can choose what kind of weapon to use for example machine guns, hammers, chainsaws, etc. blood gushes, splatters, and pools are everywhere. Severed body parts of the human graphically show without sensors. studies about violent video games are difficult to conduct and require very large numbers of children. Playing violent video games tends to increase the level of aggressive behavior, it would also result in more lethal violence or other criminal behavior. But unfortunately, there is no clear evidence to support this assumption.
Age restrictions won't give much impact on the game.
A lot of
adults who did mass shootings
were inspired
by
violent
video
games.

I had a friend who once played
violent
video
games
. He said that he was
so
shocked
because
of how detailed the game was.

'The storyline of the game was about our character was an illegal
worker and
we
got
a mission to murder
some
victim's family
because
the victim
accidentally
pissed
our character's boss.

we
will have an option of how will we murder or torture the victims, and we can choose what kind of weapon to
use
for example
machine guns, hammers, chainsaws, etc.

blood
gushes, splatters, and pools are everywhere. Severed body parts of the human
graphically
show
without sensors.

studies
about
violent
video
games
are difficult to conduct and require
very
large numbers of children. Playing
violent
video
games
tends to increase the level of aggressive behavior, it would
also
result in more lethal violence or other criminal behavior.
But
unfortunately, there is no
clear
evidence to support this assumption.
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IELTS essay Violent video games should be banned

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