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In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks? v.8

In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks? v. 8
It is well-known a fact that technology has made many features for the better life of humans. Nowadays, in many urban areas, the number of using video cameras is being inclined in order to cut the crime day by day especially in the government places. However, some experts do not like the way, as individuals want to feel freedom. I deem that there are many advantages particular, this advents as well as overweight the drawbacks. The upcoming paragraphs will examine the pros and cons before any specific conclusion. Since the public areas come in the people's hand, they spend more and more times. First and foremost benefit is that CCTV cameras provide images of the offenders. For example, if a person arranges the event in the authority place. People know very well man is local animal. They cannot celebrate the function alone. Nonetheless, he invites friends and family members. Where many people together. So it finds impossible the man who is killed. Even if the public areas install the video cameras, it will help in searching the people who what they do. In addition to it, CCTV cameras record the video of the event. For instance, if police want to see the event they can glaze. Which will be very beneficial for all the people. On the contrast side, those people who reckon that it is not the best idea. It collects the all information. To cite an example, technology has made the amazing part as cameras which keep the all data in memory. When people are talking personal with each other. Such as about the money, video cameras record it. There are higher chances of watching the clips. Some people survey and black male to the people. To conclude, even though technology has common in all parts of the world as well as made many features for people of using, yet video cameras has a wonderful factor in order to use in public and private sectors. It has enough of merits behind this occur. I deem that the use of CCTV cameras will be increased in the following years.
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features for the better life of humans. Nowadays, in
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many
urban areas, the number of using
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video
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cameras
is
being inclined
in order to
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cut
the crime day by day
especially
in the
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government
places.
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,
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some
experts do not like the way, as individuals want to feel freedom. I deem that there are
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many
advantages particular,
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advents
as well
as overweight the drawbacks. The upcoming paragraphs will examine the pros and cons
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before
any specific conclusion.

Since the public areas
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come
in the
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people
's hand, they spend more and more times.
First
and foremost benefit is that CCTV
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cameras
provide images of the offenders.
For example
, if a person arranges the
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event
in the authority place.
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People
know
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very
well
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man
is local animal. They cannot celebrate the function alone. Nonetheless, he invites friends and family members. Where
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many
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people
together.
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it finds impossible the
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man
who
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. Even if the public areas install the
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video
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cameras
, it will
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help
in searching the
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people
who what they do.
In addition
to it, CCTV
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cameras
record the
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video
of the
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event
.
For instance
, if police want to
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see
the
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they can glaze. Which will be
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very
beneficial for all the
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people
.

On the contrast side, those
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who reckon that it is not the best
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idea
. It collects the all information. To cite an example, technology has made the amazing part as
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cameras
which
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keep
the all data in memory.
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When
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people
are talking personal with each other. Such as about the money,
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video
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cameras
record it. There are higher chances of watching the clips.
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Some
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people
survey and black male to the
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people
.

To conclude
,
even though
technology has common in all parts of the world
as well
as made
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many
features for
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people
of using,
yet
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video
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cameras
has a wonderful factor in order to
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use
in public and private sectors. It has
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enough
of merits behind this occur. I deem that the
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use
of CCTV
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cameras
will
be increased
in the following years.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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