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In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is becoming popular. Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks?

It is true that video surveillance has become commonplace in many cities in recent years. While I understand that critics may see this as an invasion of privacy, I believe that the benefits do outweigh the drawbacks. The main drawback of using video surveillance cameras is that they invade our privacy, in the sense that we are constantly being watched by the authorities or by private security firms. Many people find this intrusive and feel that the recording of their movements is a form of state control that curtails their individual freedom. Thus, they are likely to be against the use of such cameras in public places. However, private information recorded by this camera is not shared and people are likely to adapt to them. Thus / In spite of the drawbacks mentioned above, I believe that the use of video cameras to monitor public areas is mostly a positive measure. The key objective of video surveillance is to deter criminals and to prevent crime. For example, petty criminals like shoplifters and pickpockets are less likely parts of cities where they know that they are being watched. At the same time, when crimes are committed, the police can use video evidence to catch and prosecute offenders. Therefore, video cameras offer valuable support to police officers, and they make cities safer for inhabitants, workers and visitors alike. to operate in In conclusion, it seems to me that we gain more than we lose from the enhanced security that CCTV cameras bring to our cities. (drawbacks are outweighed by advantages)

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