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In many cities many people are living in apartments and condominiums. Do these types of accommodation offer more advantages or disadvantages? v.1

In many cities many people are living in apartments and condominiums. Do these types of accommodation offer more advantages or disadvantages? v. 1
These days, an increase number of people are inclined to live in a high-rise condominium or apartment more than in a house. Although it is more affordable to live in these types of accommodations, it is often can cause a cluster living and some serious problems such as fire risks. On the one hand, residing in a condominium or apartment is affordable more than living in a house. Due to few spaces are used to construct or build one condominium room more than a house which usually has a living room, kitchen, and some garden areas; people can pay less to afford a living space in such accommodation. Besides, locations of most condominiums are adventurous for people who mostly commute by a public transportation. This is because the area near a sky train or subway station mostly occupied by a condominium or flat. For that reason, it is easily to save time for going to and back from work and spend the rest time with family or favorite hobbies. On the other hand, more tension trends to happen to people living in a small space such as a unit of high-rise condominium. For example, people who live in a studio room can get very little fresh air or scarcely see green area in their room, only a square view will be offered. Moreover, with many rooms contained in one place, it is risky for fire problems. To be more precise, since many people living in the same building as yours, it is hard to control living habits of other members in your place. For instance, some may cause fire risks for just curling their hair by forgetting to turn off the curling equipment. In conclusion, even though it may be money saving for buying one unit in a high-rise condominium more than a full-space house, it probably causes some mental problems or serious issues such as tensions and fire risks.
These days, an increase number of
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people
are inclined
to
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live
in a high-rise
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condominium
or apartment more than in a
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house
. Although it is more affordable to
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live
in these types of accommodations, it is
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often
can cause a cluster
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living
and
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some
serious problems such as
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fire
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risks
.

On the one hand, residing in a
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condominium
or apartment is affordable more than
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living
in a
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house
. Due
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to
few spaces are
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used
to construct or build one
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condominium
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room
more than a
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house
which
usually
has a
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living
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room
, kitchen, and
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some
garden areas;
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people
can pay less to afford a
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living
space in such accommodation.
Besides
, locations of most
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condominiums
are adventurous for
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people
who
mostly
commute by a public transportation. This is
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because
the area near a sky train or subway station
mostly
occupied by a
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condominium
or flat. For that reason, it is
easily
to save time for going to and back from work and spend the rest time with family or favorite hobbies.

On the other hand
, more tension trends to happen to
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people
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living
in a
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small
space such as a unit of high-rise
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condominium
.
For example
,
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people
who
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live
in a studio
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room
can
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get
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very
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little
fresh air or
scarcely
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see
green area in their
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room
,
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only
a square view will
be offered
.
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, with
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many
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rooms
contained in one place, it is risky for
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fire
problems. To be more precise, since
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many
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people
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living
in the same building as yours, it is
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hard
to control
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living
habits of other members in your place.
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,
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some
may cause
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fire
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risks
for
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just
curling their hair by forgetting to turn off the curling equipment.

In conclusion
,
even though
it may be money saving for buying one unit in a high-rise
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condominium
more than a full-space
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house
, it
probably
causes
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some
mental problems or serious issues such as tensions and
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fire
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risks
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay In many cities many people are living in apartments and condominiums. Do these types of accommodation offer more advantages or disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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