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In few cultures, children are encouraged by their parents and relatives that they can achieve anything if they do hard work for that thing. It has both advantages and disadvantages that are mentioned in below paragraph.

In few cultures, children are encouraged by their parents and relatives that they can achieve anything if they do hard work for that thing. It has both advantages and disadvantages that are mentioned in below paragraph. 3b2YN
To begin with, children are innocent from their childhood. They do things which make them curious. So, they mostly admire their parents in all the things. They do it for there better future goals and achieveing there dreams. Due to doing immense hard work they can get good job and have a happy life after that. On the other hand, it has many disadvantages if the child is not properly guided. They can moved to wrong path which can harmful for them. They can think of doing illegal things like smuggling or robbery for making money faster. They can think it have only one time risk and hard work needed after that their whole life become best and they will be rich over night. Moreover, they can stood up against their family for money in future. To Conclude, if the child is guided in right direction and told him/her that he/ she can achieve anything with hard work their life become easy and relax. They can get in good profession and have a prospourous life after that.
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with, children are innocent from their childhood. They do things which
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make
them curious.
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So
, they
mostly
admire their parents in all the things. They do it for there better future goals and
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achieveing
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there
dreams. Due to doing immense
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hard
work they can
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get
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good
job and have a happy
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life
after that.

On the other hand
, it has
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many
disadvantages if the child is not
properly
guided. They can
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moved
to
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wrong
path which can harmful for them. They can
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think
of doing illegal things like smuggling or robbery for making money faster.
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They
can
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think
it have
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only
one time
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risk
and
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hard
work needed after that their whole
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life
become
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best and
they will be rich
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over night
.
Moreover
, they can
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stood
up against their family for money
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in future
.
To Conclude
, if the child
is guided
in right direction and
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told
him/her that he/ she can achieve anything with
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hard
work their
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life
become easy and relax. They can
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get
in
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good
profession and have a
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prospourous
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life
after that.

IELTS essay In few cultures, children are encouraged by their parents and relatives that they can achieve anything if they do hard work for that thing. It has both advantages and disadvantages that are mentioned in below paragraph.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
177 words
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