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do you think music and photography are interesting? Why? Give two reason

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MUSIC IS GOOD FOR BRAIN DEVELOPMENT It has been proven that music plays a key role in brain development. This is because it helps with the nurturing of language, motor skills, and emotional intelligence. It also has a positive effect on memory because it can help you remember things better by associating them with familiar or meaningful pieces of music. Children listening to music from an early age can help with their language skills and improve their motor skill development. The rhythm of the music also helps children develop coordination, timing and has been proven to help sensory integration, which is important for developing fine motor skills. Music education at an early age will have long-term benefits on cognitive abilities such as memory recall later into life when they become adults; this could be due partly to hearing new sounds but not being able to recognize what’s happening visually, so are forced to use other senses more intensely than usual. Music can also help children develop their language skills, as music and words are both made up of sounds combined differently. Music helps with reading development, too, as it improves literacy by introducing a new vocabulary; when a child listens to or sings along to a nursery rhyme, they will see how certain letters make specific sound patterns that will aid reading development and phonics (the way we use our mouths). You have probably heard the phrase how a child has a brain like a sponge that absorbs information. This is why it is a fantastic opportunity to give young children the opportunity to learn a musical instrument. They will pick up the skill much easier than adults undertaking musical training. MUSIC CAN CALM YOUR NERVES BEFORE A BIG EVENT OR PERFORMANCE There’s nothing worse than being nervous before a big event or performance; it really can leave us feeling paralyzed with fear. Luckily for us, listening to music can help us with that too. As mentioned earlier, music can be great at helping you relax, so using it to calm your nerves and get you in the right frame of mind before you undertake something stressful can be hugely beneficial. Athletes listen to their favorite playlists to get pumped up before a big game or race; musicians use music to get into the right headspace before hitting the stage. Some people listen to music before taking a test that they have been worrying about unnecessarily and are finding it hard to think about anything else. Music can be a great way to get in the right mindset before embarking on something stressful or fearful. It’s also worth mentioning that music is one of your best friends if you have an exam or speech coming up soon. It might not seem like much at first, but when things start getting tough, having some music playing will help take away any distractions, so all attention remains on what needs doing instead – which makes for less stress overall! As we know from reading earlier in this article, when listening to music, we release dopamines that put us in a happier state of mind. So next week, when things start getting stressful at work, try putting on some relaxing tunes before heading into an important meeting to calm any nerves. 8). You can create your own art. One of the immediate ways I find photography gratifying is being able to see the result of my efforts. Shooting with a digital camera, I can quickly take photos off of my SD card and have a look through them on my computer. I pick out the best ones, and will normally edit them into the photography style my wife and I have found for ourselves. From there, I like being able to take these final images and use them around the house. Sometimes they just stay on the computer as a wallpaper. Other times, I’ll go ahead and print out my absolute favorites to set on a table. The best of the best, they end up blown up on a canvas print like I’ve done before with a few shots. I like being able to do this because it adds more of a personal touch to my home that is far nicer than just picking up stock art at a big box store like Target or Wal-Mart. 2). Great for making memories Hobbyist photographers range from teenage girls taking selfies to grandparents taking photos on their tablet of their grandchildren to pro photographers capturing memories for others during a wedding celebration. Photography has really enabled us to document our lives and put them into place for a long history. I remember growing up and seeing sparse photos of my grandparents, even fewer of my great grandparents, and virtually none of the generations before them. While it can be argued that people tend to overindulge with taking too many photos (and I’d probably agree in some cases), the positive outweighs the negative. Getting to see immediate photos of my niece when she was born as great as someone who couldn’t be there day one. Snapping a few photos with my friends and family is easy, and nice for me to look back on years down the road.
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MUSIC
IS
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GOOD
FOR BRAIN DEVELOPMENT

It has
been proven
that
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music
plays a key role in brain development. This is
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because
it
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helps
with the nurturing of language, motor
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skills
, and emotional intelligence. It
also
has a
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positive
effect on memory
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because
it can
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help
you remember things better by associating them with familiar or meaningful pieces of music.

Children listening to
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music
from an early age can
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help
with their language
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skills
and
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improve
their motor
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skill
development.

The rhythm of the
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music
also
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helps
children develop coordination, timing and has
been proven
to
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help
sensory integration, which is
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important
for developing fine motor
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skills
.

Music education at an early age will have long-term benefits on cognitive abilities such as memory recall later into life when they become adults; this could be due partly to hearing new sounds
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but
not being
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able
to recognize what’s happening
visually
,
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so
are forced
to
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use
other senses more
intensely
than usual.

Music can
also
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help
children develop their language
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skills
, as
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music
and words are both made up of sounds combined
differently
.

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Music
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helps
with reading development, too, as it
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improves
literacy by introducing a new vocabulary; when a child listens to or sings along to a nursery rhyme, they will
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see
how certain letters
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make
specific sound patterns that will aid reading development and phonics (the way we
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use
our mouths).

You have
probably
heard the phrase how a child has a brain like a sponge that absorbs information. This is why it is a fantastic opportunity to give young children the opportunity to learn a musical instrument. They will pick up the
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skill
much easier than adults undertaking musical training.

MUSIC CAN CALM YOUR NERVES
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BEFORE
A
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BIG
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EVENT
OR PERFORMANCE

There’s nothing worse than being nervous
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before
a
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big
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event
or performance; it
really
can
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leave
us feeling paralyzed with fear. Luckily for us, listening to
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music
can
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help
us with that too.

As mentioned earlier,
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music
can be
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great
at helping you relax,
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so
using it to calm your nerves and
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get
you in the right frame of mind
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before
you undertake something stressful can be
hugely
beneficial.

Athletes listen to their favorite playlists to
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get
pumped up
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before
a
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big
game or race; musicians
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use
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music
to
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get
into the right
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headspace
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before
hitting the stage.

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Some
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people
listen to
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music
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before
taking a
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test
that they have been worrying about
unnecessarily
and are finding it
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hard
to
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think
about anything else.

Music can be a
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great
way to
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get
in the right mindset
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before
embarking on something stressful or fearful. It’s
also
worth mentioning that
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music
is one of your
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best
friends if you have an exam or speech coming up
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soon
.

It might not seem like much at
first
,
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but
when things
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start
getting tough, having
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some
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music
playing will
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help
take away any distractions,
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so
all attention remains on what needs doing
instead
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–
which
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makes
for less
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stress
overall
!

As we know from reading earlier in this article, when listening to
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music
, we release
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dopamines
that put us in a happier state of mind.
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So
next
week, when things
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start
getting stressful at work, try putting on
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some
relaxing tunes
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before
heading into an
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important
meeting to calm any nerves.

8). You can create your
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own
art.

One of the immediate ways I find photography gratifying is being
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able
to
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see
the result of my efforts.

Shooting with a digital camera, I can
quickly
take
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photos
off of my SD card and have a look through them on my computer. I pick out the
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best
ones, and will
normally
edit them into the photography style my wife and I have found for ourselves.

From there, I like being
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able
to take these final images and
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use
them around the
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house
.
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Sometimes
they
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just
stay on the computer as a wallpaper. Other times, I’ll go ahead and print out my absolute favorites to set on a table. The
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best
of the
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best
, they
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end
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up blown up
on a canvas print like I’ve done
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before
with a few shots.

I like being
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able
to do this
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because
it
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adds
more of a personal touch to my home
that is
far nicer than
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just
picking up stock art at a
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big
box store like Target or
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Wal-Mart
.

2).
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Great
for making memories

Hobbyist photographers range from teenage girls taking selfies to grandparents taking
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photos
on their tablet of their grandchildren to pro photographers capturing memories for others during a wedding celebration.

Photography has
really
enabled us to document our
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lives
and put them into place for a long history.

I remember growing up and seeing sparse
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photos
of my grandparents, even fewer of my
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great
grandparents, and
virtually
none of the generations
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before
them.

While it can
be argued
that
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people
tend to overindulge with taking too
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many
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photos
(and I’d
probably
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agree
in
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some
cases), the
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positive
outweighs the
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negative
.

Getting to
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see
immediate
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photos
of my niece when she
was born
as
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great
as someone who couldn’t be there day one. Snapping a few
The usual collocation for "photos" is "of" not "with". Did you mean "photos of my friends"?
photos with my friends
and family is easy, and nice for me to look back on years down the road.
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IELTS essay do you think music and photography are interesting? Why? Give two reason

Essay
  American English
24 paragraphs
872 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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