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In cities and towns in all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of the this and What action can be taken to solve this problem? v.1

In cities and towns in all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of the this and What action can be taken to solve this problem? v. 1
Traffic congestion has an increasingly worrying issue in the modern society. It needs to be addressed due to high use of private transport and infrastructure of major cities. The essay will analyse this problem and suggest some solutions. One of the main reasons for this issue is few people choose to use public transport in favour of private vehicle. This is because cars provide comfortable space and flexible time to be used while public transport is not really convenient to be taken and often have time delay issues. For example, many workers have to follow tube timetable and be crowded with others at peak time. A solution is for government to improve the efficiency, reliance, and comfort of public transport, which would encourage people to take public transport in order to reduce the use of personal cars. Another problem is that infrastructure of major cities is inadequate to deal with high volume of traffic. When it comes to business development, more and more people go to work in the urban so the demand for roads have gradually increased. This issue could be tackled by the government building overpasses and underpasses to deal with the roads that cannot handle high volume of traffic. As a result, it would improve the problem of traffic jam and save people's time to work In conclusion, there is no doubt that the problem of traffic congestion has serious impact on people's lives so the government plays a key role in tackling this issue. Therefore, it should be addressed as soon as possible, otherwise people could end up facing more traffic problems.
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Traffic
congestion has an
increasingly
worrying
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issue
in the modern society. It needs to
be addressed
due to high
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use
of private
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transport
and infrastructure of major cities. The essay will
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analyse
this
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problem
and suggest
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some
solutions.

One of the main reasons for this
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issue
is few
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people
choose to
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use
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public
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transport
in
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favour
of private vehicle. This is
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because
cars provide comfortable space and flexible
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time
to be
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used
while
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public
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transport
is not
really
convenient to
be taken
and
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often
have
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time
delay
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issues
.
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,
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many
workers
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have to
follow tube timetable and
be crowded
with others at peak
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time
. A solution is for
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government
to
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improve
the efficiency, reliance, and comfort of
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public
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transport
, which would encourage
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people
to take
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public
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transport
in order to
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reduce
the
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use
of personal cars.

Another
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problem
is that infrastructure of major cities is inadequate to deal with high volume of
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traffic
. When it
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comes
to business development, more and more
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people
go to work in the urban
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so
the demand for roads have
gradually
increased. This
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issue
could
be tackled
by the
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government
building overpasses and underpasses to deal with the roads that cannot handle high volume of
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traffic
.
As a result
, it would
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improve
the
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problem
of
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traffic
jam and save
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people
's
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time
to
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work


In conclusion
, there is no doubt that the
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problem
of
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traffic
congestion has serious impact on
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people
's
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lives
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so
the
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government
plays a key role in tackling this
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issue
.
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, it should
be addressed
as
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soon
as possible,
otherwise
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people
could
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end
up facing more
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traffic
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problems
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In cities and towns in all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the causes of the this and What action can be taken to solve this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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