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In certain countries, it is prefer that students should take from studies after completed high school and they are encouraged to work or to travel.

In certain countries, it is prefer that students should take from studies after completed high school and they are encouraged to work or to travel. ENyB3

Some young generations choose travel abroad because they want have a rest. This advantage make friends, see world and fascinating times. I think young teenagers travel the world between finishing school and starting university. Some of the possible advantages of encouraging to learn about different cultures, people and to see new places. I think they have a lot of time in this period. They can to work in their personal life. Some young generations choose saving money by in some part time jobs and they pay their life expenses when they start college. If they work in advance, they can pay the costs without worrying. And they to focus only their studies.

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Some
 young generations choose travel abroad This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 they Probably a preposition is missing after 'want'.want to have
want have
 a rest. This advantage This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 friends, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 world and fascinating times. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
 young This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenilesadolescents
teenagers
 travel the world between finishing school and starting university. If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?Some
Some of the
 possible advantages of encouraging Did you mean "learning"? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.learning
to learn
 about This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 cultures, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 and to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 new places. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
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a lot of
 time in this period. They can to work in their personal life. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
Some
 young generations choose saving money by in This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.part-time
part time
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).jobs, and
jobs and
 they pay their life expenses when they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 college. If they work in advance, they can pay the costs without worrying. And they to focus This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 their studies. 