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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Ke5w
It is often argued that in many nations few individual believe it would be beneficial to invest more on construction of new railway roads while, others who consist that it is better to use this money in improvement of current public transportation. This essay will intend to analysis both the view along with my prospective. First of all, it would be helpful to invest more on building fast way railroads. To elaborate it, traveling through the railway is quite faster and also it is economical. For example, traveling to Punjab to Up by train it takes about 13 hours with the cost of 500 whilst, it requires 18 hours if travel through bus and the rate is near about 2000. Hence, it would be very useful to spend on railway lines. To begin with, it is needed to pay out money for the improvement of ongoing transportation services like busses etc because the condition of these modes are unfavorable. People face many difficulties. In other words, there is no proper maintenance and services of public transport. The busses are overloaded, timing is not proper, not well qualified drivers and also there is no facilities for our old age persons. To exemplify, it is generally seen that the seats of the busses are tear, window panels are broken and people are standing in the doors. As a result, it is really needed to spend money in the improvement of current public transportation. To conclude, government of nation state should spend equally on the construction of fast railway lines as well as on improvement of existing public transportation.
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argued that in
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many
nations few individual believe it would be beneficial to invest more on construction of new
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railway
roads while, others who consist that it is better to
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use
this money in
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improvement
of
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current
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public
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transportation
. This essay will intend to analysis both the view along with my prospective.
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First of all
, it would be helpful to invest more on building
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fast
way railroads. To elaborate it, traveling through the
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railway
is quite faster and
also
it is economical.
For example
, traveling to Punjab to Up by train it takes about 13 hours with the cost of 500 whilst, it requires 18 hours if travel through bus and the rate is near about 2000.
Hence
, it would be
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very
useful to spend on
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railway
lines. To
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begin
with, it
is needed
to pay out money for the
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improvement
of ongoing
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transportation
services like busses etc
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because
the condition of these modes are unfavorable.
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People
face
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many
difficulties.
In other words
, there is no proper maintenance and services of
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public
transport. The busses
are overloaded
, timing is not proper, not well qualified drivers and
also
Did you mean "there are no facilities"?
there is no facilities
for our
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old
age persons. To exemplify, it is
generally
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seen
that the seats of the busses are tear, window panels
are broken
and
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people
are standing in the doors.
As a result
, it is
really
needed to spend money in the
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improvement
of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
.
To conclude
,
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government
of nation state should spend
equally
on the construction of
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fast
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
lines
as well
as on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
improvement
of existing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
.
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IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
266 words
6.0
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