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an increasing number of companies have invested in sporting events as an effective method to introduce themselves

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Nowadays, an increasing number of companies have invested in sporting events as an effective method to introduce themselves. It is believed that it is a good idea while other people think that there are drawbacks to the company. Each of these opinions has its own merits. The former opinion finds its strong supporting arguments. Firstly, today there are a lot of people who veally like sports and sport is always an activity that attracts people whether it is children or adults. So, choosing to sponsor events is a very smart choice to promote the company to everyone. However, there are plausible reasons for supporting the latter view. To begin with, recently, when overdoing sponsoring sports events, it can cause discomfort to fans. When those companies have a lot of problems or even break the law, it will greatly affect the sports event. This affects not only the company but also the sporting event and fans can boycott them at any time. Both sides examined, I find it hard to absolutely agree with either of the above views. It is my point of view that companies do not overuse sponsorship to advertise themselves instead develop the company so that people notice.
Nowadays, an increasing number of
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have invested in sporting
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events
as an effective method to introduce themselves. It
is believed
that it is a
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good
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idea
while other
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people
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think
that there are drawbacks to the
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company
. Each of these opinions has its
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own
merits.

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today
there are
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people
who
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veally
like
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sports
and
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sport
is always an activity that attracts
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people
whether it is children or adults.
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So
, choosing to sponsor
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events
is a
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very
smart choice to promote the
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company
to everyone.

However
, there are plausible reasons for supporting the latter view. To
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begin
with, recently, when overdoing sponsoring
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sports
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events
, it can cause discomfort to fans. When those
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companies
have
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a lot of
problems or even break the law, it will
greatly
affect the
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sports
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event
. This affects not
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only
the
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company
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but
also
the sporting
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event
and fans can boycott them at any time.

Both sides examined, I find it
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hard
to
absolutely
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agree
with either of the above views. It is my point of view that
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companies
do not overuse sponsorship to advertise themselves
instead
develop the
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company
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so
that
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people
notice.
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IELTS essay an increasing number of companies have invested in sporting events as an effective method to introduce themselves

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
200 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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