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a/d always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

a/d always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
While some people think that employee should be involved in business decisions, others argue that these decisions should be left to the people in key positions. In my opinion, I believe that its better for the company when decisions are taken by higher management because they have a better understanding and access to information about the company. First of all, businesses work to make profits on the services they sell to customers. The top management whose role is to make profits has in-depth access to the companies information and the markets forecast. By contrast, junior management has only knowledge about the department they work; therefore, it's important that only key people should be allowed to make decisions. Furthermore, involving more people into critical decisions will slow down the decision-making process, especially during the times to time-critical decisions. On the other hand, junior employees are a crucial part of the company. Involving them in the decision-making process helps them to feel that they are a part of the management team. This belief increases their responsibility and makes them more motivated towards the work. However, I don't agree with the notion here that employees should be part of a business decision to increase their motivation. There are many other ways management can explore to motivate their employees such as promoting them, increasing salary and benefits but, companies should not take decisions based on the employee's motivation. In conclusion, decisions should be taken by the upper management as they have access to all the aspects of the company. Involving, the employees in the decision-making process will only delay the decision-making process. Moreover, the primary goal of the company is to make profits.
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employee
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decisions
, others argue that these
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people
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company
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decisions
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by higher
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management
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because
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, businesses work to
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profits on the services they sell to customers. The top
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management
whose role is to
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make
profits has in-depth access to the
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companies
information and the markets forecast. By contrast, junior
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management
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knowledge about the department they work;
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employees
are a crucial part of the
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company
. Involving them in the
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decision-making
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process
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helps
them to feel that they are a part of the
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makes
them more motivated towards the work.
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employees
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decision
to increase their motivation. There are
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management
can explore to motivate their
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employees
such as promoting them, increasing salary and benefits
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,
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companies
should not take
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based on the employee's motivation.

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,
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decisions
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by the upper
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management
as they have access to all the aspects of the
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company
. Involving, the
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employees
in the
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decision-making
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process
will
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only
delay the
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decision-making
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Moreover
, the primary goal of the
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company
is to
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profits.
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IELTS essay a/d always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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