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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Distance learning and online computer classes should replace classroom learning v.547

Distance learning and online computer classes should replace classroom learning v. 547
Both online education and classroom learning are adventageous. However, instead of classroom lessons, learning from far away and online computer lessons are not my cup of tea. Thus, I prefer to classroom learnings as they are more interesting, absantence is crucial for learning and interactive communication is beneficial for learning. Initially, classroom lessons are the courses that students are used to do. Instead of staying at home without any preparation, getting prepared in the morning and going to school for a reason is keeping the motivation high. Moreover, students understand the topic when they watch it live since it is more interesting to watch the progress of topic from someone. The emotion which the circumstances supply during a live lesson, must be exposed to students for effecient undertanding. As it is more attractive and more interesting to listen something from a body in front of you, students’ attention keeps on the lesson. Therefore, the knowlegde of the students commence to enhance slightly. Secondly, If students are on the computer during lesson, it is not possible to keep the attandence on the lesson as they may pay attention to the another stuffs. Additionally, they don’t have to attend the lessons since they just join the lesson online. On the other hand, attandance and going to lesson are burdens for he students having lesson in classrooms. In case of an absantence to the lesson, the grade of them decreases. For instance, one of my teacher had to go to abroad in high school and the time was same with the lesson we had. She decided to have the lesson on Skype. However, some of my classmates didn’t join and many of them didn’t listen to the lesson in spite of joining to Skype. They prefered to play game while teacher was telling something important. Finally, indeed most significantly, interactive communication with other classmates and teacher is quite effective for learning. Most probably, online lessons are just recording. So that, students having misunderstanding about the subject, can not ask question to understand the subject deeply. In other words, they experiences the lack of communication. However, they have the freedom to ask anything they don’t understand, meaning they have plenty of communication convenience. In addition to that they share the information that they copied with other mates. This is a stunning factor for learning. On the whole, classroom lessons are more beneficial for students since it appeals more effective, attandence is established in classroom and interactive communication is easier in classrooms.
Both
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online
education and classroom
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learning
are
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adventageous
.
However
,
instead
of classroom
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lessons
,
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learning
from far away and
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online
computer
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lessons
are not my cup of tea.
Thus
, I prefer to classroom
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learnings
as they are more interesting,
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absantence
is crucial for
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learning
and interactive
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communication
is beneficial for learning.

Initially
, classroom
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lessons
are the courses that
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students
are
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used
to do.
Instead
of staying at home without any preparation, getting prepared in the morning and going to school for a reason is keeping the motivation high.
Moreover
,
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students
understand the topic when they
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watch
it
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live
since it is more interesting to
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watch
the progress of topic from someone. The emotion which the circumstances supply during a
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live
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lesson
,
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must
be exposed
to
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students
for
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effecient
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undertanding
. As it is more attractive and more interesting to listen something from a body in front of you,
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students’
attention
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keeps
on the
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lesson
.
Therefore
, the
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knowlegde
of the
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students
commence to enhance
slightly
.

Secondly
, If
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students
are on the computer during
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lesson
, it is not possible to
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keep
the
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attandence
on the
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lesson
as they may pay attention to the another stuffs.
Additionally
, they don’t
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have to
attend the
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lessons
since they
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just
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join
the
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lesson
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online
. On the
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other
hand,
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attandance
and going to
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lesson
are burdens for
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he
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students
having
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lesson
in classrooms. In case of an
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absantence
to the
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lesson
, the grade of them decreases.
For instance
, one of my teacher had to
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go to abroad
in high school and the time was same with the
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lesson
we had. She decided to have the
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lesson
on Skype.
However
,
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some
of my classmates didn’t
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join
and
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many
of them didn’t listen to the
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lesson
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in spite of
joining to Skype. They
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prefered
to play game while teacher was telling something
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important
.

Finally
,
indeed
most
significantly
, interactive
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communication
with
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other
classmates and teacher is quite effective for
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learning
. Most
probably
,
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online
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lessons
are
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just
recording.
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So
that,
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students
having misunderstanding about the subject, can not ask question to understand the subject
deeply
. In
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other
words, they
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experiences
the lack of
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communication
.
However
, they have the freedom to ask anything they don’t understand, meaning they have
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plenty
of
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communication
convenience.
In addition
to that they share the information that they copied with
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other
mates. This is a stunning factor for learning.

On the whole
, classroom
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lessons
are more beneficial for
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students
since it appeals more effective,
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attandence
is established
in classroom and interactive
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communication
is easier in classrooms.
21Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay Distance learning and online computer classes should replace classroom learning v. 547

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
417 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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