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If you were given the choice of a school or work assignment would you prefer to write long report or give speech in front of a large group of people v.1

If you were given the choice of a school or work assignment would you prefer to write long report or give speech in front of a large group of people v. 1
There is a school of thought thinking that teachers should not give homework for children, while other people hold a view that the setting of homework is an essential part of education. I personally would side with the second view that children should be given homework. On the one hand, there are numerous reasons why it is believed that teachers should not give assignments for learners. The first reason is that students are always under an enormous amount of study pressure from school and still have to spend most of their time at home to finish homework for the next day. It means that the students will spend less quality time to develop a relationship with their family, their friends as well as for outdoor activities. The second reason is that subjects at school these days are more about theory, and learners are less likely to get exposed to practical experiences. In Vietnam, for example, those who study chemistry or physics have to deal with a lot of theoretical homework rather than doing real experiments. On the other hand, those who firmly believe in the importance of assignments give out several benefits of it. Firstly, doing assignments at home could significantly help learners remember the formula more easily especially in mathematics or chemistry. Therefore, practicing similar tasks at home is the optimal option for children. Secondly, Homework in tertiary education is not only about some simple exercises, but it could also be a group assignment or research. By doing this, it helps students to reach their full potential in learning by encouraging independent learning and problem-solving. In addition, it is also a useful method to aid students to develop an independent study habit. In conclusion, although a large number of people think that homework is truly an unnecessary burden on children, I still hold a belief that it is an indispensable aspect of education.
There is a school of
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thought
thinking that teachers should not give
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homework
for
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children
, while other
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people
hold a view that the setting of
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homework
is an essential part of education. I
personally
would side with the second view that
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children
should be
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given
homework.

On the one hand, there are numerous reasons why it
is believed
that teachers should not give
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assignments
for learners. The
first
reason is that
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students
are always under an enormous amount of study pressure from school and
still
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have to
spend most of their time at home to finish
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homework
for the
next
day. It means that the
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students
will spend less quality time to develop a relationship with their family, their friends
as well
as for outdoor activities. The second reason is that subjects at school these days are more about theory, and learners are less likely to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
exposed to practical experiences. In Vietnam,
for example
, those who study chemistry or physics
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have to
deal with
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a lot of
theoretical
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homework
rather
than doing real experiments.

On the other hand
, those who
firmly
believe in the importance of
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assignments
give out several benefits of it.
Firstly
, doing
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assignments
at home could
significantly
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help
learners remember the formula more
easily
especially
in mathematics or chemistry.
Therefore
, practicing similar tasks at home is the optimal option for
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children
.
Secondly
,
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Homework
in tertiary education is not
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only
about
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some
simple exercises,
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but
it could
also
be a group
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assignment
or research. By doing this, it
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helps
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students
to reach their full potential in learning by encouraging independent learning and problem-solving.
In addition
, it is
also
a useful method to aid
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students
to develop an independent study habit.

In conclusion
, although
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a large number of
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people
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think
that
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homework
is
truly
an unnecessary burden on
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children
, I
still
hold a belief that it is an indispensable aspect of education.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay If you were given the choice of a school or work assignment would you prefer to write long report or give speech in front of a large group of people v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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