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If you had to work on a project for school would you rather: a. work alone b. work with classmates c. work with a tutor Provide reasons and examples to support your response. v.2

If you had to work on a project for school would you rather: a. work alone b. work with classmates c. work with a tutor Provide reasons and examples to support your response. v. 2
No one can deny that there are positive and negative aspects to working on a project alone or with classmates or with a tutor. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely prefer to work with a tutor. It is firm belief that working with a tutor can be helpful for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs. To begin with, tutors have more knowledge and guide students in the right way. Although working with classmates can be beneficial, this may not be helpful for me. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. Ten years ago, I worked on a science project with my tutor and he gave me great ideas and we made that project success. Also, my teacher had a great expertise in delivering many successful projects in our school. Moreover, I learned my strengths and weaknesses which helped me become a better person. As a result, I still apply the knowledge he guided me through out the project in my daily work. Secondly, working with teachers can save a lot of time because they know how can a project be successful. However, working alone can be time consuming because one has to do a lot of research. Drawing from my own experience, When I was working on science project, my teacher gave me a list of articles to refer to. In addition, I just focused on those articles and finished my project earlier than the deadline. Therefore, this strategy helped me gain a tremendous success in my office projects. To sum up, I strongly believe that performing a task with tutor is a better idea because they will guide students in the right direction and it will save a lot of time.
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and
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aspects to
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on a
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project
alone or with classmates or with a
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tutor
. If I
were forced
to choose, I would definitely prefer to work with a
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tutor
. It is firm belief that
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working
with a
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tutor
can be helpful for a number of reasons, and I will develop these
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ideas
in the subsequent paragraphs.

To
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begin
with,
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tutors
have more knowledge and guide students in the right way. Although
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with classmates can be beneficial, this may not be helpful for me. I
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have to
admit that my opinion on this matter has been
profoundly
influenced by my
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own
personal experience. Ten years ago, I worked on a science
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project
with my
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tutor and
he gave me great
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ideas and
we made that
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success.
Also
, my teacher had a great expertise in delivering
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many
successful
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projects
in our school.
Moreover
, I learned my strengths and weaknesses which
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helped
me become a better person.
As a result
, I
still
apply the knowledge he guided me
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in my daily work.

Secondly
,
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with teachers can save
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a lot of
time
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because
they know how can a
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be successful.
However
,
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alone can be
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time consuming
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one
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research. Drawing from my
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own
experience, When I was
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working
on science
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project
, my teacher gave me a list of articles to refer to.
In addition
, I
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just
focused on those articles and finished my
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project
earlier than the deadline.
Therefore
, this strategy
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helped
me gain a tremendous success in my office projects.

To sum up, I
strongly
believe that performing a task with
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tutor
is a better
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idea
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because
they will guide students in the right direction and it will save
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a lot of
time.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay If you had to work on a project for school would you rather: a. work alone b. work with classmates c. work with a tutor Provide reasons and examples to support your response. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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