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If you could learn one new skill you’ve never had the opportunity to try before, what skill would it be? Explain your choice by using specific reasons and examples.

If you could learn one new skill you’ve never had the opportunity to try before, what skill would it be? Explain your choice by using specific reasons and examples. OMOpE
From my point of view, some missed opportunities in our life were not available before. If I had an opportunity to learn one new skill, I would learn music science professionally, because I strongly believe that music is structural, mathematical, and architectural. It's based on relationships between one note and the next so it can play a significant role in humans' life. In this essay, I will discuss to what extent music has a positive effect on humans' mood, the healing power of music and how music can connect people with different cultures as a universal language. To start with, Music can do great things for humans' mood and can also stimulate the mind. There are many things in music, to which one can listen and bring attention to. People have always found music significant in their lives, whether for enjoyment in listening, the emotional response, performing or creating. For instance, if you want to feel happy since you are not in good mood, you can listen to songs that are happy and this works the other way around too. On the other hand, the healing power of music should be considered. Music helps us release our anger or frustration in a way that doesn't hurt anyone, gets our bodies moving, and brings peace and calm to our hearts and it also has the power to improve our health and well-being. For example, it can boost your immune system by increasing levels of the antibody immunoglobulin A. Besides, while every country has its language(s), there's only one language we can all understand: the language of music. We don't even need words to understand what music is saying. Music plays a very important role in bringing people together. Whether it's a festival, concert, or club night, people come together to enjoy the music that is being played. Every year I see a lot of different people from a lot of different countries attending festivals. When the music is being played, it seems everyone understands what is coming out of the speakers and they just start dancing to it. In conclusion, it shows that music has benefits to our life and because of these reasons if I had an opportunity I would learn music. However, I do believe that learning is a process that should never be stopped.
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science
professionally
,
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I
strongly
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music
is structural, mathematical, and architectural. It's based on relationships between one note and the
next
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so
it can play a significant role in humans' life. In this essay, I will discuss to what extent
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music
has a
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positive
effect on humans' mood, the healing power of
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music
and how
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music
can connect
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people
with
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different
cultures as a universal language.

To
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with,
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can do great things for humans' mood and can
also
stimulate the mind. There are
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many
things in
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music
, to which one can listen and bring attention to.
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have always found
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music
significant in their
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, whether for enjoyment in listening, the emotional response, performing or creating.
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, if you want to feel happy since you are not in
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mood, you can listen to songs that are happy and this works the other way around too.

On the other hand
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music
should
be considered
.
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Music
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us release our anger or frustration in a way that doesn't hurt anyone,
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our bodies moving, and brings peace and calm to our hearts and it
also
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our health and well-being.
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, it can boost your immune system by increasing levels of the antibody immunoglobulin A.

Besides
, while every country has its language(s), there's
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only
one language we can all understand: the language of
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music
. We don't even need words to understand what
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music
is saying.
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plays a
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very
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important
role in bringing
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together. Whether it's a festival, concert, or club night,
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people
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together to enjoy the
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that is
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countries attending festivals. When the
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is
being played
, it seems everyone understands what is coming out of the
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speakers and
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dancing to it.

In conclusion
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that
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music
has benefits to our life and
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of these reasons if I had an opportunity I would learn
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.
However
, I do believe that learning is a process that should never be
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stopped
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IELTS essay If you could learn one new skill you’ve never had the opportunity to try before, what skill would it be? Explain your choice by using specific reasons and examples.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
386 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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