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If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer. v.1

If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer. v. 1
Children who begin reading early perform better in school studies later in life. Early reading skills are very important in a child's future academic achievement. This essay will discuss the importance of early reading and preschool factors that may influence a child's performance in the school. Firstly, it is important to understand that the brain gets accustomed to the act of reading when a child is exposed to learning at a young age. As a result, he can discipline his brain to acquire knowledge at an older age. This is because the brain, like every other muscle in the body, can take any shape if exercised properly and consistently. For example, my cousin began preschool when he was a year old, because his parents were too busy and could not stay at home with him. However, it turned out that it was a good thing for him because he found it easy to read books with proper concentration for an extended time. Apart from early reading habit, another preschool factor that could affect a child's future success in education is sharing and collaborating. In play groups, children are taught to share their toys and play together, mimicking adults working in teams. To be successful in high school and colleges, a student should be able to perform group tasks. To support my point, a 1998 United Nations study showed that children who attended kindergartens at a very young age performed better in sharing ideas and collaborating in the university. The study further went ahead to link the success to the values that they imbibed in playing in groups as babies. In conclusion, early learning and preschool attendance are very crucial for achieving success in a child's future academics.
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factors that may influence a
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performance in the school.

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to understand that the brain
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when a child
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when he was a year
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he found it easy to read books with proper concentration for an extended time.

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habit, another
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factor that could affect a
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future success in education is sharing and collaborating. In play groups, children
are taught
to share their toys and play together, mimicking adults working in teams. To be successful in high school and colleges, a student should be able to perform group tasks. To support my point, a 1998 United Nations study
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that children who attended kindergartens at a
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young age performed better in sharing
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ideas
and collaborating in the university. The study
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went ahead to link the success to the values that they imbibed in playing in groups as babies.

In conclusion
,
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learning and
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attendance are
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crucial for achieving success in a
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future academics.
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Samuel Johnson

IELTS essay If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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