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If you could ask a famous person one question, what would you ask? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v.1

If you could ask a famous person one question, what would you ask? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 1
People are increasingly suffering from new kind of issues as a result of sweeping changes to the way that people consume and share information. This essay will discuss the main causes of problems, including dependence on the social networks and increased online aggression. This essay will also suggest solutions to these problems, including the rest of social media and offline hobbies. Nowadays people are spending more hours on the internet than ever before. In additional, they have relied on public opinion here. Many people suffering from bullying on the social networks and insulting anonymous comments, that could lead to the problems in the real life. For example, many people feel isolated and decided to drop school or workplace to avoid being bullied. This often results in mental and physical suffering because they cannot understand the causes of online aggression against them. Finding healthy ways to relieve the stress generated by bullying is extremely important. Hobbies and leisure are all good ways to cope with the stress of bullying. People need to realise that if they live only for strangers on the internet and upset about aggressive message they will suffer mentally either physically. For instance, many users have complexes due to imposed standards of beauty and they start neglecting their individuality. Therefore, in order to reduce bullying impact one should include the rest of the internet and outdoor activities on the regular basis. To conclude, the internet is a fascinating innovation that has transformed people's lives, but not without negative impact. This essay discussed about problems caused by additional from the social networks and aggressive here. This essay also suggested that the solution to this problem are twofold: rest of social media and have outdoor activities.
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People
are
increasingly
suffering from new kind of issues
as a result
of sweeping
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changes
to the way that
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people
consume and share information. This
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essay
will discuss the main causes of
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problems
, including dependence on the
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social
networks and increased online aggression. This
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essay
will
also
suggest solutions to these
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problems
, including the rest of
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social
media and offline hobbies.

Nowadays
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people
are spending more hours on the internet than ever
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before
. In additional, they have relied on public opinion here.
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Many
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people
suffering from
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bullying
on the
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social
networks and insulting anonymous comments, that could lead to the
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problems
in the real life.
For example
,
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many
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people
feel isolated and decided to drop school or workplace to avoid
being bullied
. This
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often
results in mental and physical suffering
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because
they cannot understand the causes of online aggression against them.

Finding healthy ways to relieve the
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stress
generated by
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bullying
is
extremely
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important
. Hobbies and leisure are all
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good
ways to cope with the
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stress
of
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bullying
.
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People
need to
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realise
that if they
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live
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only
for strangers on the internet and upset about aggressive message they will suffer mentally either
physically
.
For instance
,
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many
users have complexes due to imposed standards of
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beauty and
they
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start
neglecting their individuality.
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, in order to
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reduce
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bullying
impact one should include the rest of the internet and outdoor activities on the regular basis.

To conclude
, the internet is a fascinating innovation that has transformed
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people
's
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lives
,
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but
not without
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negative
impact. This
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essay
discussed about
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problems
caused by additional from the
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social
networks and aggressive here. This
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essay
also
suggested that the solution to this
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problem
are twofold: rest of
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social
media and have outdoor activities.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay If you could ask a famous person one question, what would you ask? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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