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if universities are given financial support to develop researches, which one do you think would receive more benefits? a) To predict weather more accuratelyb) To clean rivers and oceanc) To deal with outer space v.1

if universities are given financial support to develop researches, which one do you think would receive more benefits? a) To predict weather more accuratelyb) To clean rivers and oceanc) To deal with outer space v. 1
Nowadays, unemployment rates are rising to an alarming level. This would increase the poverty over communities, and eventually crime numbers will increase. In this essay, I will talk about potential causes, then try to propose some solutions. One of the main reasons for this issue is the deteriorating economy. Where most companies look to boost their profits and decrease the risks involved in their investments, collapsed economy will push investors to relocate their companies to other places. If a company decided to move their work to another country, local workers will lose their jobs. Governments should be aware that the political situation and the flexibility of laws concerning taxes and investment are crucial factors in the decision of local and overseas investors when they choose the place to start a business. Another cause is related to educational institutions such as universities and colleges. Where the universities are required to provide the market with qualified workforces in the most required fields, the vast majority of the offered programs are not decided based on prior study of the market. This lack of coordination between different organizations and educational institutions with result on increasingly worrying unemployment rate. To solve this problem, better coordination should be carried out to modify the current educational and professional programs according the need of local employers. To conclude, increasing levels of unemployment is a serious issue which results from many potential causes such as dangerous political situation; inefficient investment system; slow growing economy; and mismatch between worker's qualifications and job requirements. To tackle this problem, governments should start implementing new policies to encourage investors from inside and outside the country, moreover, the educational institutions should plan and work considering the needs of the employers.
Nowadays, unemployment rates are rising to an alarming level. This would increase the poverty over communities, and
eventually
crime numbers will increase. In this essay, I will talk about potential causes, then try to propose
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
solutions.

One of the main reasons for this issue is the deteriorating economy. Where most
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
look to boost their profits and decrease the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
risks
involved in their investments, collapsed economy will push investors to relocate their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
to other places. If a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
their work to another country, local workers will lose their jobs.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Governments
should be aware that the political situation and the flexibility of laws concerning taxes and investment are crucial factors in the decision of local and overseas investors when they choose the place to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
a business.

Another cause
is related
to
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educational
institutions such as universities and colleges. Where the universities
are required
to provide the market with qualified
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workforces
in the most required fields, the vast majority of the offered programs are not decided based on prior study of the market. This lack of coordination between
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different
organizations and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
educational
institutions with result on
increasingly
worrying unemployment rate. To solve this problem, better coordination should
be carried
out to modify the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
educational
and professional programs according the need of local employers.

To conclude
, increasing levels of unemployment is a serious issue which results from
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many
potential causes such as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
political situation; inefficient investment system; slow growing economy; and mismatch between worker's qualifications and job requirements.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
To
tackle this problem,
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governments
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
implementing new policies to encourage investors from inside and outside the country,
moreover
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
educational
institutions should plan and work considering the needs of the employers.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay if universities are given financial support to develop researches, which one do you think would receive more benefits? a) To predict weather more accuratelyb) To clean rivers and oceanc) To deal with outer space v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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