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If I had €1 million, it would be easy to find two good ways to help people.

If I had €1 million, it would be easy to find two good ways to help people. 5AyGQ

First of all, I would donate half of the money to the children's hospital in my town. They are raising money to build bedrooms for visiting families. They could probably start building immediately if I gave them half a million euros. Secondly, I would build a new primary school. If I would build primary school, the school will have a great opportunities for childrens to learn and grow. So to sum up, I would use the money to make life better for the families of children in hospital to improve facilities and improve children's knowledge at my new primary school.

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, I would donate half of the money to the children's hospital in my town. They are raising money to build bedrooms for visiting families. They could probably
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